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Posted Aug 5, '12 at 8:13pm

acmed

acmed

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Start out with who-gives-one (but not in a ****** way) merc fighting belligerents from the Tekko-Joust Ruins (Video Game thread ruins). His entire camp and team is destroyed, so he decides to find more work in the central castle.


Okay. That's a good start to the first chapter. I like it. You can start writing! Go!

Too cliche. Nobody ever has criminals in these kinds of stories, hunters are rare, bounty hunters and low level officers, competitive marksmen and jousters, all things we could pick from, and much more. I think we should avoid the cliche as best we can.


I think we should take it one at a time via chapter, like Chillz just did.
 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 8:17pm

murasaki9

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Thanks Murasaki! Would you like to be a writer too? :3

Oohhh, I see I'm wayyyyy behind. I'd love to be a writer too!
But somebody hit me up fast! I don't know what's going on.
 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 8:59pm

acmed

acmed

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Oohhh, I see I'm wayyyyy behind. I'd love to be a writer too!
But somebody hit me up fast! I don't know what's going on.


Read the map. That's where the story takes place. Good and bad dragons are in the land, but they take back the land against the humans call home, which is really the dragons'. We're waiting for Chillz to finish chapter one.
 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 9:14pm

ChillzMaster

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You're free to click this link here to check out me as I work.

-Chillz

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 9:18pm

acmed

acmed

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You're free to click this link here to check out me as I work.


You're using the word I! Don't! When they meet together, it'll be confusing, because we'll have multiple main characters. Just change that quickly.
 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 9:37pm

ChillzMaster

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Concerning the link above:

Use the chat tab on the right side of the screen!

-Chillz

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 10:06pm

ChillzMaster

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Alright everypony, here's our first chapter entitled "What Lies Ahead".

It is noteworthy that the actual story name is still up in the air...

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âDoes this make my butt look big?â
âItâs an eighty-pound heap of refined steel plate. Itâs not supposed to look pretty,â
âBut does it make my butt look big?â
â...you look fabulous, now can we get a move on?â
âOf course!â Geoffrey declared happily, leading the way outside their tent and into a firestorm. His companion, Trevor he liked to be called, had paid for his lie and began burning horrendously thanks to a well-placed flaming rock.
âSeems like the Mindless Ones of Tekko-Joust are finally stepping up their game!â Geoffrey declared, narrowly dodging another flaming rock. A glance about the mercenary camp proved that Trevorâs fate was not an exclusive privilege; corpses littered the ground and rivulets of blood dribbled down the small hillside. The blasts slowed, then the sound of artillery stopped altogether.
âTheyâll start coming, looking for something to eat,â Geoffrey remarked, picking up a few bags and running down the hillside. Any survivors? Nope. Any hope of getting that gold he was promised? Nope. Were things going to get worse for him if he didnât start running? Eeyup. The young merc rolled his eyes; the city of Tekko-Joust had always been a piss-hole, but had recently fallen into total disrepair. Some blamed the new âmanagementâ. Others blamed the ever-consuming Mindless Ones. Geoffrey blamed the economy.
A resonating boom echoed through the empty air, chilling the young mercenary to his core. Geoffreyâs heart stopped, his leg froze, and his mind dared him to look up. He knew what was up there, and what they meant to the lands around here. Finally, he gave in. A quick glance to the sky revealed two massive metal abominations, black spikes protruding from their orb-esque forms. One had (what could barely be called) dark orange eyes, glowing like fire. There was a luster to his glow, a warmth in the stare, something you could feel in your heart. The other, however, had a piercing cold glance from his light-blue metal irises. He didnât care about who got hurt on his way to glory, just that his realm was kept in check. The two monstrosities boomed at each other for a moment or two before turning their backs to the insignificant soldier-for-hire and hovered off slowly.
âMaster of Cold and the Top Flame, always trying to keep their lessers in order,â Geoffrey chuckled, marching off to the west, âWell that leaves me unemployed. None of the cities are within walking distance,â Geoffrey looked out at the glimmering castle in the distance, âand I really never got to go on that vacation my dad promised me before I slit his throat,â a moment of heavy pondering passed.
So with a spring in his step and a whistle in his throat, the great mercenary Geoffrey set off for Castle Variantia.


-Chillz

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 10:12pm

acmed

acmed

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While he's got that, I say bravo to him, but what does everyone else think? Does it make sense? Did you get it? Does it need expansion?

Also, I call dibs on the next chapter. LOL

And, a story name... Since it'll be mainly about dragons... Rise of the Dragons? Dragon Rise? Anything else?

Oh, and we will make a thread based on the story itself. This is the behind the scenes, so to speak.

And, try to use Google Docs so we can live chat and help out during the process.

So, first chapter a good? I think so.

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 10:14pm

ChillzMaster

ChillzMaster

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Self-inserts are always good.

-Chillz

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 10:21pm

acmed

acmed

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Self-inserts are always good.


*tries not to relate to your mother*
 
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