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Splendor in Memories

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Posted Sep 7, '12 at 10:19am

Max000_Extreme

Max000_Extreme

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The beauteous yesterday
                     is fading like a blushed twilight
                      Though nothing can bring back
                     The hours of sweet treasured past
                           I will grieve not
                       but rather find splendor
                            in its memories

Posted Sep 7, '12 at 4:06pm

ellock

ellock

254 posts

The poem is fine, I just feel like it could have more of an ending and more resolution to it. Plus there is no real drive in the poem that compels you to connect with the emotions or story of the poem. I have no problem with the poem and I think it is good, but that is my input. I don't really want to sound like a jerk through so please don't take this like I hate it and think you stink.
 

Posted Sep 7, '12 at 7:52pm

wolf1991

wolf1991

3,054 posts

I can see you're new to the AMW forum. A word of advice from an old hand: don't make multiple threads for your poetry, just keep poetry and shorter works in one, all encompassing thread. Any long work is best to have a seperate thread.
 
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