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@nichodemus Focusing on details before getting the big picture is a waste of time. It doesn't matter what words are used as long as an idea is conveyed in a thoughtful, understandable manner.
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@shanke Much better. There's one small issue and a bunch of small grammatical issues. Fix those and you're done. You need to put a space after every period not before every period.
P1 L1 Should be two sentences. First one ends after Armor Games. Capitalize Armor Games.
P1 L2 "But...time." isn't a full sentence.
P1 L3 "were" not "was" because "last levels" is plural.
P1 L3-4 "The challenges the same." You're missing a verb, probably were.
P1 L6 You're missing punctuation after "all)". There should be a period after it. "the...voices." would be a new sentence.
P1 L7 "Improvement-wise" add the hyphen.
P1 L8 That should be a comma between "grenades" and "so".
P2 Leave off the last sentence, "For me...games". If it doesn't really matter, leave it out.
alovera1 There are several grammatical issues.
P1 L1 That's not a grammatical sentence. The subject appears twice, but there are no commas. You're also missing a linking verb.
P1 L3 "Because" is capitalized for no reason.
P1 L3-4 You do not need this sentence: "I forgot...top)."
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