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Posted Jan 1, '13 at 6:49pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,228 posts

elder scrolls? yeah that game makes your computer laggy.

No I had a couple of viruses...got them cleared last night though so my computer should be better

I have Skyrim for PS3...so it is unrelated to computer problems. It is just so **** addictive

Expect poems later tonight (family dinner right now...so none now)

 

Posted Jan 1, '13 at 7:40pm

pickpocket

pickpocket

3,318 posts

It is just so **** addictive

Like me and BO2. (4th prestige, just sayin)
Thats why I have slowed down my page, that and spending time with family n mushy crap like that :P

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 4:09am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,228 posts

Two poems..like I promised

A Love Poem

Ever-changing eyes holding mine in a bind
Words wishing to portray, alas, I cannot find
I sit, in wonderment, with only frivolous thoughts
Hoping that mutuality is what lays across

My days linger on, with a continuous boasting
And lost desire thoughts the mind was hosting
For how could one horrid be with one so true?
A mindset that flowed, through and through

But then came the day, when fate took control
With phone in hand, my arm it did pull
Then words I was not speaking poured from my tongue
How can it be a leap of faith when I was joyfully flung?

An unthinkable step towards what was the unimaginable
Now to text her is something tangible
A heart fluttering whenever I see a message
What was once unthinkable becomes a vestige

Then, that fateful day when my heart suddenly stopped
And news I never would have thought true was dropped
Mutual feelings existed, met with much surprise
Instantaneously my happiness did rise

Time did pass, and anxiously we waited
For the opportunity when true harmony could be created
Finally the time I thought was impossible did come
At last a hardened life has a joyous outcome

pang's miscellaneous stuff

A title a title, do they understand?
A title a title, do they comprehend?
A joke a joke, what I thought was obvious
A joke a joke, to it are they oblivious?

The women, so supple, has their moment of time
When likened to evil they suddenly become
And for all these years while they exists in their prime
They bark and snap into man's eardrum

3 simple letters give chills to any male
For they know what terror it brings
These letters, 1 title, do they prevail?
At the top of each page, the childish joke clings

 

Posted Jan 4, '13 at 5:36pm

R2D21999

R2D21999

8,090 posts

Wow didn't expect someone like you would have a heart big enough for a love poem.

And what are those three words that bring chills to every male?

 

Posted Jan 5, '13 at 2:04am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,228 posts

Wow didn't expect someone like you would have a heart big enough for a love poem.

What's a..heart?
But in all seriousness...yeah I can be a lil romantic

And what are those three words that bring chills to every male?

3 letters..which technically do mean 3 words. But the hint for what they are is in the poem ;)

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Will have the poem I was talking about a while back ago up later tonight!

 

Posted Jan 5, '13 at 3:50am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,228 posts

Alright..here it is...meh Magnum Opus. The response to To His Coy Mistress

To Her Potent Lover

     Thy heavy words, which carry to me so true
Have given me a perspective new.
At once, I agree, we should seize the day,
Then tighten our talons, and make it stay.
We shall send the sun into Kong Ming's maze,
Where even one brighter would find that ways
Which seem a true path are no more
Than further entrapment. But alas! Still there will soar
That shining moon, ever so mocking.
Though to get rid of there exists a way, be it so shocking.
The moon, so confused, as one can most clearly see
Has many faces, all wishing to truly be.
Their ever long battle gives chaos to the ocean
As same does time to love's devotion.
For now they take turns to soften their fighting.
So to harden it, send them unaddressed love writing,
     Why, my love, dost thou fear that winged chariot?
Merely clip its wings, then pay no attention to it.
Why dost thou shake at time's continuation?
Stand firm, for love will cause it obliteration.
For true love, time is a cruel illusion,
Made to infect lovers' minds and cause confusion
That love is not everlasting and will surely fleet,
But our love will be the cause of Time's defeat.
We shall take that trident from the mighty seafarer
And with our love, against we shall show no terror.
With this mighty tool giving the ocean's command
We shall wash away Time's counting sand.
Thy holder of such true and loving tongue
I promise thee we shall keep this love young.
     The vegetable love will most surely grow
To a beautiful garden, never be it low.
At each passing moment to it we shall tend,
And even during separation, its growth shall be a trend.
A love so powerful, it would make any other look false,
Merely just actions acted out impulse.
A love so sweet, it makes Miracle Fruit seem sour.
A love so strong, not even a tyrant has equal power.
Those poems of old, with praising sentiments of their love
Are merely extended ways to say "By Jove".
Our love, which can't be denied truest of them all
Contains so much strength, it could make Zeus fall.
But now, thou has an odd look upon thy face,
I inquire thou to answer: be this true love, or be it base?

 

Posted Jan 5, '13 at 9:23am

DancesWithFoxes

DancesWithFoxes

58 posts

Why is it that everytime I read your poems I get the chills?

 

Posted Jan 26, '13 at 6:43am

dragonball05

dragonball05

1,571 posts

Love the poems. To Her Potent Lover was very nice, and a great reaction to To His Coy Mistress. I remember reading that one in high school, and I think I remember something about reactions to it, but I don't recall making poems for reactions to it, so kudos for that. Very well done. Critically speaking though, and in no way should I expect perfect poems, I just felt that poem had some problems with its feet. Of course, that might be being overly critical, but it's always something to think about. To be more specific, there were certain couplets that in comparing the two lines themselves, sometimes had a different foot count, as well being compared to the poem in its entirety, had a different foot count. Again, that's maybe overanalyzing, but I'm tired, so whatevz :P Other than that depth of analysis, the content itself was wonderful. I especially loved the last couplet, which should give that man a reason to worry :P

As for the other two poems, I think since they were shorter, there was less a structural issue with feet, and possible meter, not sure exactly where you were going with those, but I had an idea. Just critiquing solely on content, I loved those as well. You should definitely do more poetry, and if you haven't already considered it, enter the poetry contest. Oh also, I think the love poem is my favorite, simply because I'm a romantic, and always will be.

As for the doodles, very nice. I liked the robogolemn especially. It just looked cool to me. Can't wait to see the better quality ones (if you still plan on reuploading them) to see them in better quality. Also, I hope you put up more drawings, because seeing things is fun.

Crazy all nighter guy, out.

 

Posted Jan 26, '13 at 11:20pm

R2D21999

R2D21999

8,090 posts

How did I miss this?

That was a nice poem. It made me happy of being a robot so I don't have to go through love.

 

Posted Feb 21, '13 at 12:54pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,228 posts

Yep..I still remember this haha

@dragonball - I don't think you are over-analyzing at all. I recently have just gotten into keeping track of foot count..so it is something I definitely try to keep track of now. With To Her Potent Lover..I was just going with a Free Verse for my meters (also...I had written like half+ of it in about ~40 min in a class before my English Lit class)

Also..yes, the doodles will be uploaded with a much clearer picture when I get the chance

For now..another poem. My submission for the General Poetry contest (I'll grab my haiku entry in a bit)

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Objectifying with bleak desperation,
Their curs├ęd words of piercing temptations
Full of barked claims of perceived divination
That announces my impeding ****ation

They shout, with their giant voices booming.
I shrink, fearing the dark light looming.
They hush, with calm tales of unconditional love.
I grow, with curious thoughts to speak of.

Their truth they cling on to, ready to defend,
But to my truth, jabbing questions they do send!
My anger burning, could their persistence bend?
Or must I stay tormented til days end?

Upon a lone moment of seclusion,
I begin to ponder their delusion.
But lo! Sudden insight lets my inner eye see
The judgement I too threw maliciously

I resolve, with immediate resolute
To find agreement within this wicked dispute.
For alas, neither party can truly refute
The truths which would result the others mute

 
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