ForumsArt, Music, and WritingOfficial Poetry Contests - Theme: Sunshine (Due: May 31)

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Devoidless
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Welcome to the newest contest on ArmorGames!

This is the new and improved version of both the Periodic Poetry Contest and the Haiku Contest. From this point out, both contests will be combined into one massive contest for everyone to enjoy! And as such, each user is allowed to enter is both contests with separate entries if they so desire, effectively doubling the odds of winning.
Each contest (One being general poetry and the other exclusively haiku) will have one winner every month. Every month, two winners (one from each contest shall be chosen and receive a merit for all their hard work. Show it off to your friends, gloat about it to your enemies! Tell your parents about it and confuse them! It's a win-win-win-win-win scenario, folks.

Rules

General Poetry Contest:
- It must fit the theme if the month (same theme as the Haiku Contest).
- It must be submitted by the deadline.
- It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
- It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).
- The poem must be created for this contest
- A user cannot win twice in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every month!)
- Only one submission per user will be accepted

Once a month a winner will be chosen from all the received entries. To begin, the Moderation/Administration Team will act as judges and choose winners. Subject to change depending on how well things go.
The winner will then make a comment on the ContestWinners profile to receive a merit.
(Original idea by ubertuna, itemized rules by DragonMistress, modified by Devoidless)

Haiku Contest
"A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons."
Well, that said, here are the rules:
- It must fit the theme of the month (same as General Poetry Contest)
-The haiku must be original (no plagiarizing)!
- It must be submitted before the deadline
- It must be created for the contest (no using works previously written)
- One submission per user
- The same user cannot win twice in a row (but they are welcome to submit!)

Once a month a winner will be chosen from all the received entries. To begin, the Moderation/Administration Team will act as judges and choose winners. Subject to change depending on how well things go.
The winner will then make a post on the ContestWinners profile to receive a merit.
(Original idea and itemized rules by Maverick4, modified by Devoidless)
First Themes
The first themes to kick off this contest shall be:
- The theme for the General Poetry contest this run is "Touch of Truth".

- The theme for the Haiku contest is "Broken Bond".
Submitting an entry
Since there are two separate contests, users are required to mention in the post which contest they wish to use the entry for. Any entry without this is subject to not being entered into either contest.
Examples of how to clarify which contest an entry is for:
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This poem is for the General Poetry contest

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-This is for the Haiku contest

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I'd like to enter this for the General Poetry/Haiku contest

Remember, each user is allowed to join both contests!

Alright! Looking forward to seeing what you all can create! Good luck, and have fun with it!
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pangtongshu
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Even a figurative exaggeration of conflict? Conflict is the heart of most stories.


Oh no...conflict I'm quite fine with. Once it escalates to a full scale war, though...
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sounds fun!

Gantic
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Due to minor computer problems, posting of judging is delayed. Next theme and deadline are already posted.

Gantic
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==HAIKU==
Two inputs, my commentary only. Two definitions placed high and that's not to be expected normally.

Parsat

Dinner date at home,
Cosby Show in the background.
Mmm, JELL-O Pudding?

This seems like a rehash of the previous entry but less applicable to the current theme than the previous one. It seems less complete like it's taken out of context. Each line is a little too discrete and disconnected. It seems more like it's avoiding the subject rather than being unwilling to suggest it or even finding a mutual unspoken understanding.

MagicTree
Steely looks, staring,
Silence speaks all to be said,
As Time waltzes on.

A definition of sorts. Steely looks and staring seem redundant. Steely looks don't exactly speak of mamihlapinatapai. The contrast with time waltzing on gives an odd image. Two determined souls staring at each other as time pass around them?

jtjackdog
they share a glance of
need of what the other has,
this is my Haiku.

The last line is a copout and not entirely relevant to the haiku. Filler syllables are understandable, but filler lines are not. It would have been better to submit a couplet or a revised haiku.

Salvidian
Pointlessness is it.
Exacerbating nothing.
But confusing all.

An outsider perspective on mamihlapinatapai wondering what the heck is going on between two people. The periods make the reading very stilted like Yoda tried to write a haiku telling Luke to say what's on his mind.

THIRD
pangtongshu

Longèd hopelessness...
Dare I construct confidence?
For what if I'm wrong?

Longed may be the wrong word here. Why is hopelessness longed for when it is something the speaker wishes to overcome? The haiku otherwise captures the apprehension.

SECOND
HUA7XFan122396

Two unspoken thoughts
A pair of eyes staring back
Asking me to start

A direct definition of mutual want. Simple in its construction with a good image capturing the conflict in a moment.

FIRST
Riptizoid101

Silence fills the air,
Yet stares say more than speech can
And they understand

A direct definition of tacit understanding. This one is written in a passive third person. Not a bad construction.

==POETRY==
As there are only two entries, no winners will be chosen.

EmperorPalpatine
As we were breaking bread,
I thought I'd take her to bed:
The unspoken answer
Was enough to ensure
A wide grin upon my head.

The third and fourth lines don't fit well with the rest of the limerick with regard to rhyme and meter.

Quirinus1
The Tranquilous Tree

Far away, he weeps.
No friends, no heir.
So stubborn. Hybris.

Will he drink the poisonous drink of honey and venom?

I'm not sure this fits the theme. Certainly, mutual non-action will lead to no action, but out of context, this could be about almost anything else.

Congratulations Riptizoid1. Please post your winning entry to ContestWinners to receive your merit.

The theme for June is The War of Love and Death due June 23rd, 2013.
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Longed may be the wrong word here. Why is hopelessness longed for when it is something the speaker wishes to overcome?


He does wish to overcome..but fears the outcome (as shown by final line). As from what Wikipedia states: unwilling to suggest or offer themselves.
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This is my entry for the normal poetry (not haiku)
It's Depressing and long, but its only thing I could come up with.

Two Lovers In a Blood Soaked Night,
Under the old oak tree,
Fighting their battles evermore,
in hopes to getting freed.
For they were meant to be war criminals,
For a war still going on around them,
Both were wounded deeply,
But they held hands everstill.
As the fight grew on,
the Lovers stayed where they were,
Until a cold hand wheeled them,
off in a cart,
for death do them part.

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My Submission for the Haiku
(just wanted it to get both out in one blow AND ITS DEPRESSING AGAIN!)

Earth shattered like glass
The Kiss that is always last
From shadows of them

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Take cover, my love,
I lay claims on your embrace:
The right to bear arms.

Riptizoid101
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So I can't enter the haiku contest now that I've won? Poetry contest then!

War's Lost Love

A war that is fought without an army,
Battles that are fought without guns,
Usually fought with words that are smarmy
Yet their words still weigh many tons,
However, both sides conjoin if they no longer develop
A common cause; A goal which both of them
Wished to achieve. A goal which enveloped
Both of them. Their fate had them condemned
Because it was no longer there.

The two fought as foes,
But they withered away, blessed
As friends, And although
Feelings could never be expressed,
Their happiness was guaranteed.

Gantic
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You can enter, you just can't win again.

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A never ending war between mankind.
Not over land and gold,
But of hearts and growing old.
We all want just one,
To keep to ourselves.
Our lovely little secret,
In our souls held by a spell.

A most blissful feeling,
That cannot be compared.
A personal journey,
With only one that can be shared.
But what is true bliss,
Without catastrophe?
How can we reach true joy,
Without agony?

Is not the taste sweeter,
When its prologue was sour?
_____

I believe I'll be submitting this into the non-haiku contest. It isn't exactly up to what I want it to be, but I figure it's at least a semi-decent way to re-enter the AMW. Good luck to all contestants~

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Love succeeds once more
The Lovers, perish'd, unite
Death conquers once more

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I'm sorry my love
That I had to break your heart
For you to be free

First entry in over a year; hello there, it's been a mighty while hasn't it? Seems I'm still an armatar trendsetter despite my absence.
A little less direct of an entry for the Haiku contest, I'm hoping I'm not too rusty with words.
On that note; are Mav and Moon still lurking around?

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I'm sorry, above's my first splash, only taking in account ''war of love''
It should be more something like this;

I'm sorry my love
That I had to pierce your heart
To keep you with me

That will be my official entry

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The darkness slowly crept along with swift haste,
It's brighten'd smile shadowing the land
And covering the ground in which I stand,
Whilst unveiling the enemies I face.

On either side, the other side: a smile.
A greeting from such a long farewell,
But with the obstacle of equal hell,
For such conquest I aim to quell.

The thunderous applause crack'd across the sky
As the cloudless night drew an eerie silence.
Their gazes grazing over me; silent.
Tonight shall be the lovers' final goodbye.

I feel their stares, trying to pierce through,
As if it'd be any help for them.
I stand, intrepid, waiting to condemn,
but with a sudden movement the chaos grew.

The lover to my left darted violently,
While the other graced along carefully.
He must have thought she did so beautifully,
But not so much as my blade passed through silently.

Her body hit the ground ever so peacefully,
Ever so gracefully, with never more a breath.
And when I ****** her cheeks, covered with death,
His rage exploded, and he charged forcefully.

Never shall you know the look of true intent,
The look of a man with no more left to lose.
The look of a man whose inner being has been let loose.
The look of a man as, from his body, his head is sent.

His body crumpled to the ground
As I took in the silence of the area.
But again broke out mass hysteria,
As she came down with a most impressive sound.

Love, or so you all call her,
Spoke to me with a voice truly serene.
"You may have taken their lives clean,
But more are out there, and you they abhor."

Then, at once, she was gone as she came.
A tyrannical one, she really is,
Vying to rule all with the ruse of loving bliss.
So, in order to halt her, I became.

I am viewed the villain, until one's final breath.
Such is the price to pay for being Death.

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