ForumsArt, Music, and WritingOfficial Poetry Contests - Theme: Sunshine (Due: May 31)

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Welcome to the newest contest on ArmorGames!

This is the new and improved version of both the Periodic Poetry Contest and the Haiku Contest. From this point out, both contests will be combined into one massive contest for everyone to enjoy! And as such, each user is allowed to enter is both contests with separate entries if they so desire, effectively doubling the odds of winning.
Each contest (One being general poetry and the other exclusively haiku) will have one winner every month. Every month, two winners (one from each contest shall be chosen and receive a merit for all their hard work. Show it off to your friends, gloat about it to your enemies! Tell your parents about it and confuse them! It's a win-win-win-win-win scenario, folks.

Rules

General Poetry Contest:
- It must fit the theme if the month (same theme as the Haiku Contest).
- It must be submitted by the deadline.
- It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
- It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).
- The poem must be created for this contest
- A user cannot win twice in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every month!)
- Only one submission per user will be accepted

Once a month a winner will be chosen from all the received entries. To begin, the Moderation/Administration Team will act as judges and choose winners. Subject to change depending on how well things go.
The winner will then make a comment on the ContestWinners profile to receive a merit.
(Original idea by ubertuna, itemized rules by DragonMistress, modified by Devoidless)

Haiku Contest
"A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons."
Well, that said, here are the rules:
- It must fit the theme of the month (same as General Poetry Contest)
-The haiku must be original (no plagiarizing)!
- It must be submitted before the deadline
- It must be created for the contest (no using works previously written)
- One submission per user
- The same user cannot win twice in a row (but they are welcome to submit!)

Once a month a winner will be chosen from all the received entries. To begin, the Moderation/Administration Team will act as judges and choose winners. Subject to change depending on how well things go.
The winner will then make a post on the ContestWinners profile to receive a merit.
(Original idea and itemized rules by Maverick4, modified by Devoidless)
First Themes
The first themes to kick off this contest shall be:
- The theme for the General Poetry contest this run is "Touch of Truth".

- The theme for the Haiku contest is "Broken Bond".
Submitting an entry
Since there are two separate contests, users are required to mention in the post which contest they wish to use the entry for. Any entry without this is subject to not being entered into either contest.
Examples of how to clarify which contest an entry is for:
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This poem is for the General Poetry contest

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-This is for the Haiku contest

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I'd like to enter this for the General Poetry/Haiku contest

Remember, each user is allowed to join both contests!

Alright! Looking forward to seeing what you all can create! Good luck, and have fun with it!
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Dude...I don't know. I Google'd it...blame Google.


What are you trying to say anyway? I've never seen anyone put an accent in longed. Are you trying to stress the 'e' more? If not then I don't see why you'd need any accentuation at all.
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What are you trying to say anyway? I've never seen anyone put an accent in longed. Are you trying to stress the 'e' more? If not then I don't see why you'd need any accentuation at all.


When I normally write poetry..I use accents in my e's (so in this case, long-ed) or take out the e's (long'd) to be able to have better control over syllable count, emphasis, focus direction, etc.

Of late..I haven't focused on it as much. No real reason for stopping..just been lazy with it
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The grave accent is for marking an extra syllable, so longed becomes long-ed. One famous example is Shakespeare's Sonnet 116. "Oh no! It is an ever-fixèd mark"

pangtongshu had the accent right the first time.

Salvidian
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Didn't know that. Thanks for clearing that up.

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Next theme will most likely be "An Acrostic Depicting a Slice of Childhood Interpreted as a Dance of Colors on the Throat of a Hummingbird Flitting about the Garden on a Chilly Spring Day in a Rainy Month of May" if I were at all serious, but no, it will probably be The War of Love and Death unless there is good reason it shouldn't.

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The War of Love and Death unless there is good reason it shouldn't.


I'm allergic to War
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Even a figurative exaggeration of conflict? Conflict is the heart of most stories.

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Even a figurative exaggeration of conflict? Conflict is the heart of most stories.


Oh no...conflict I'm quite fine with. Once it escalates to a full scale war, though...
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sounds fun!

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Due to minor computer problems, posting of judging is delayed. Next theme and deadline are already posted.

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==HAIKU==
Two inputs, my commentary only. Two definitions placed high and that's not to be expected normally.

Parsat

Dinner date at home,
Cosby Show in the background.
Mmm, JELL-O Pudding?

This seems like a rehash of the previous entry but less applicable to the current theme than the previous one. It seems less complete like it's taken out of context. Each line is a little too discrete and disconnected. It seems more like it's avoiding the subject rather than being unwilling to suggest it or even finding a mutual unspoken understanding.

MagicTree
Steely looks, staring,
Silence speaks all to be said,
As Time waltzes on.

A definition of sorts. Steely looks and staring seem redundant. Steely looks don't exactly speak of mamihlapinatapai. The contrast with time waltzing on gives an odd image. Two determined souls staring at each other as time pass around them?

jtjackdog
they share a glance of
need of what the other has,
this is my Haiku.

The last line is a copout and not entirely relevant to the haiku. Filler syllables are understandable, but filler lines are not. It would have been better to submit a couplet or a revised haiku.

Salvidian
Pointlessness is it.
Exacerbating nothing.
But confusing all.

An outsider perspective on mamihlapinatapai wondering what the heck is going on between two people. The periods make the reading very stilted like Yoda tried to write a haiku telling Luke to say what's on his mind.

THIRD
pangtongshu

Longèd hopelessness...
Dare I construct confidence?
For what if I'm wrong?

Longed may be the wrong word here. Why is hopelessness longed for when it is something the speaker wishes to overcome? The haiku otherwise captures the apprehension.

SECOND
HUA7XFan122396

Two unspoken thoughts
A pair of eyes staring back
Asking me to start

A direct definition of mutual want. Simple in its construction with a good image capturing the conflict in a moment.

FIRST
Riptizoid101

Silence fills the air,
Yet stares say more than speech can
And they understand

A direct definition of tacit understanding. This one is written in a passive third person. Not a bad construction.

==POETRY==
As there are only two entries, no winners will be chosen.

EmperorPalpatine
As we were breaking bread,
I thought I'd take her to bed:
The unspoken answer
Was enough to ensure
A wide grin upon my head.

The third and fourth lines don't fit well with the rest of the limerick with regard to rhyme and meter.

Quirinus1
The Tranquilous Tree

Far away, he weeps.
No friends, no heir.
So stubborn. Hybris.

Will he drink the poisonous drink of honey and venom?

I'm not sure this fits the theme. Certainly, mutual non-action will lead to no action, but out of context, this could be about almost anything else.

Congratulations Riptizoid1. Please post your winning entry to ContestWinners to receive your merit.

The theme for June is The War of Love and Death due June 23rd, 2013.
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Longed may be the wrong word here. Why is hopelessness longed for when it is something the speaker wishes to overcome?


He does wish to overcome..but fears the outcome (as shown by final line). As from what Wikipedia states: unwilling to suggest or offer themselves.
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This is my entry for the normal poetry (not haiku)
It's Depressing and long, but its only thing I could come up with.

Two Lovers In a Blood Soaked Night,
Under the old oak tree,
Fighting their battles evermore,
in hopes to getting freed.
For they were meant to be war criminals,
For a war still going on around them,
Both were wounded deeply,
But they held hands everstill.
As the fight grew on,
the Lovers stayed where they were,
Until a cold hand wheeled them,
off in a cart,
for death do them part.

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My Submission for the Haiku
(just wanted it to get both out in one blow AND ITS DEPRESSING AGAIN!)

Earth shattered like glass
The Kiss that is always last
From shadows of them

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Take cover, my love,
I lay claims on your embrace:
The right to bear arms.

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