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Posted Mar 25, '13 at 1:37am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,232 posts

I pride depth in simplicity

Now I must ask..what is wrong with complexity and simplicity used together?

I hate to do this..but I must because I can easily break it apart..but take my haiku, for example

Brightened smiles meet
Euphoric friendship elates
Death, the cruel jokester..

To be honest, a bit of me was dissapointed because I was so upfront and simple about it.
Brightened smiles meet - a meeting has taken place, in which "brightened smiles" are brought about, hinting at a friendship/some form of relationship
Euphoric friendship elates - Backs up the idea of a friendship being formed..and states that the friendship is one that is still growing/becoming stronger
Death, the cruel jokester - The broken bond part. Implies that at least one of the friends have died, breaking their bond. Now, here is where some complexity steps in. The jokester part..which implies that the surviving friend believes that death took his/her friend for the sole purpose of "playing a joke" on him..which is a metaphor for the death being, in the eyes of the surviving friend, an unnecessary one

(note: I am not bringing my haiku up because I believe it should have won. I use it for my example because I have more confidence in using mine as an example because I know I can fully explain my poetry better than I could explain someone else's)

Now, I have nothing wrong with simplicity, but I think there is a difference between simplicity and poor construction.

Again, I state, that with the haiku winner..there is no reason for emotion to be felt. It does not emotionally draw the reader in, it does not cause the reader to think, etc. Instead it leaves the reader with a skeletal structure of a story

In the same manner, why is death cruel?

No offense, but please have a comprehension of my poetry before trying to use it to back up what you are saying. I take issue with this sentence because of its attempt to degrade my haiku as if I am a hypocrite to what I am saying, but I can safely say that I leave proficient clues as to why death is cruel

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 7:10am

HUA7XFan122396

HUA7XFan122396

76 posts

Thanks, Gantic, for finishing the judging on this contest we all waited so long to be judged. I understand that you all have lives to take care of whether it be just you, or a family, but if it takes an entire month to judge a poetry contest... maybe there shouldn't be one

That being said, here is my haiku for the 2nd poetry contest.

Old, wooden floorboards
Supporting my family.
I thank them for this.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 8:38am

wolf1991

wolf1991

3,061 posts

No offense, but please have a comprehension of my poetry before trying to use it to back up what you are saying. I take issue with this sentence because of its attempt to degrade my haiku as if I am a hypocrite to what I am saying, but I can safely say that I leave proficient clues as to why death is cruel

Calm down. And now, kindly shut up. For myself, Gantic's reasoning is perfectly sound, because I view poetry along the same lines. But, not only poetry, writing as well.

Saying someone should have a "comprehension of my poetry" is extremely arrogant to the point of disbelief. That's like saying no one is fit to judge your poems except for you. Poetry is a medium to evoke emotion and thought, but it is also there for interpretation.

As for what is to be done, I am some what divided on the matter. I do believe that Gantic was right in removing the merrits when he did, participation had been slipping, judges had been inconsistent (I being one of them in a long line of madness). However, this new format seems to have been thrown together haphazardly. Now, I appreciate the fact that life is complicated and interferes with the best laid plans, paying for education, food, and rent isn't cheap, especially when it's on your own dollar.

I say we keep things moving and adjust as time goes on. The worst case senario would be to stop, but if stopping allowed for better organization, then I wouldn't be against it. The AG community these days doesn't possess the same level of raw talent and skill from back when I was more active. That isn't saying there aren't talented people, but there's a different quality to it, this is especially noticable in AMW.

On a completely personal note I think I'll start posting in my old thread, if only to revive my writing habits, seeing as the past year has gotten me nowhere.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 9:07am

MagicTree

MagicTree

360 posts

Floors, Haiku Contest:

The Tower of Life
The Tower of Life,
Its steps winding upward,
Floors, to be conquered.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 9:26am

MagicTree

MagicTree

360 posts

Floors, Poetry Contest:

Lonely World
Darkness, in the lonely house,
My footsteps, falling on the wooden planks.
The silence hinting at the worse.

The world howls at my existence,
The floorboards moan their ghastly song,
When I let the pain out.

Ice in my once-warm heart,
The floor collapses beneath me,
For it cannot hold on anymore.

Neither can I.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 11:15am

TopRank_

TopRank_

88 posts

btw, the page 14 comment was a PLAY. For more info on PLAY'D, visit my profile. sorry for any confusion.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 1:48pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,232 posts

Saying someone should have a "comprehension of my poetry" is extremely arrogant to the point of disbelief. That's like saying no one is fit to judge your poems except for you

I understand it comes off as arrogant..but my point is that he tried to use my poetry as a way to show me as a hypocrite, and missed that mark completely.

I have no qualms about someone interpreting my poetry differently than I anticipated, more the power to whomever does so! There is a difference, however, between interpreting it differently and miscomprehension

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 5:05pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

4,971 posts

Haiku Contest

Ding! The doors open;
People come and people go,
Some stay where they are.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 6:46pm

HahiHa

HahiHa

4,948 posts

Knight

Floors? Seriously?

I might add that I am a little disappointed with how things went, too. First the contest is frozen for so long for no apparent reason ("Judging is made, posting asap!"), and when it's finally up, there's this discussion about the judging.
Looks like you bit off more than you could chew. But I'm in no place to tell you how to do things, just... take note of my opinion.

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Anyway, here's my Haiku for what it's worth:

Got a promotion,
Up up to floor five hundred;
Embrace cold darkness.

Cookie for the reference.

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 6:49pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

3,950 posts

Cookie for the reference.

Heart of Darkness?

 
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