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Official Poetry Contests - Theme: Clickety Clack (due July 24)

Posted Aug 17, '13 at 1:13am

Salvidian

Salvidian

3,950 posts

I've judged a few different things in my day and I can't recall ever not judging on the deadline date. My expectations are probably just too high.

 

Posted Aug 17, '13 at 4:58am

jeol

jeol

3,565 posts

In any case, there's only one week left till the deadline. Best get working on whatever is missing.

 

Posted Aug 17, '13 at 3:13pm

Gantic

Gantic

6,773 posts

Moderator

For sure I posted? I don't change the title until right before I hit submit, so it updates.

HAIKU

Fishing season, Pa -
The creek, the kayak, the rods;
License to sport game.

This haiku puts you in the setting of fishing season, either in the moment or the anticipation of the moment. It does well to distill one scene. For image alone, this wins out over the rest.

Always Searching

Searching for answers
Something more, something better-
For the thrill of dreams!

This one shows an idea of attaining something better with uncertainty and hope and possibly a lack of conviction if only for the thrill of dreams.

What Did I...?
What did I do wrong?
What did I do to deserve
This? What did I miss?

This one lacks imagery. The break in the second line is the best part of this haiku. It highlights "this", whatever this may be. However, there is no context for this perceived failure.

POETRY

Why?
Why am I always tired?
Why am I always cold?
Why am I always hungry?

Why indeed. This one is another perception of failure without context, so what answer could there be? Disease? Homelessness? Nightmare? Psychosomatic causes?

 

Posted Aug 17, '13 at 3:20pm

jeol

jeol

3,565 posts

There's something missing...
I'm not quite sure what to do -
Confusion; question?

 

Posted Aug 21, '13 at 7:50pm

Riptizoid101

Riptizoid101

3,228 posts

Disdainful depart,
It absconded, but I knew,
Something was missing

 

Posted Aug 21, '13 at 8:43pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

My poem:

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The End.

 

Posted Aug 23, '13 at 11:39am

MagicTree

MagicTree

360 posts

Haiku
The fire in your heart,
Burning so powerfully,
Has come to ashes.

Poetry
The eyes, they no longer shine,
The glisten that would change my world,
A mind poisoned with fog of hatred.
The hands that would move mountains,
Are lifeless and clouded.
The heart that would burn passion into the sky,
Is a wisp of flame in a ocean of pain.
Something is missing,
And I need it back.

 

Posted Aug 29, '13 at 6:59pm

Gantic

Gantic

6,773 posts

Moderator

Next theme might be a color of your choice.

 

Posted Aug 29, '13 at 11:32pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,241 posts

Macaroni Yellow.

 

Posted Sep 2, '13 at 11:14pm

Gantic

Gantic

6,773 posts

Moderator

Judging to be posted tomorrow or the day after.

Crayola colors are cray cray.

 
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