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Posted Oct 11, '13 at 7:53pm

Maverick4

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I don't know what to make of this

He's a Michigan fan, and wrote it after Michigan went two weeks barely beating overmatched teams at home. Notably winning by one against a 1-5 Akron team.

 

Posted Oct 12, '13 at 12:14am

Salvidian

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"Welcome!" the man said
"Come get a cookie!" he said
Then it fell apart

The thing made me cry
I haven't slept in two weeks
Now I sit and drink

I can't drink them gone
I suppose I should redeem
My poor, lost cookie

 

Posted Oct 13, '13 at 9:24pm

Reton8

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He's a Michigan fan, and wrote it after Michigan went two weeks barely beating overmatched teams at home. Notably winning by one against a 1-5 Akron team.

University of Michigan College football for those not well versed in USA sports.

 

Posted Oct 13, '13 at 9:25pm

Reton8

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University of Michigan College football for those not well versed in USA sports.

Or possibly University of Michigan basketball or hockey. I'm not really too into sports myself. Sorry if I just made it more confusing.

 

Posted Oct 13, '13 at 9:39pm

Gantic

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He's a Michigan fan, and wrote it after Michigan went two weeks barely beating overmatched teams at home. Notably winning by one against a 1-5 Akron team.

That makes more sense. I don't follow college sports.

Or possibly University of Michigan basketball or hockey. I'm not really too into sports myself. Sorry if I just made it more confusing.

Neither one. Hockey didn't start until this month and basketball season doesn't start until next month.

 

Posted Oct 13, '13 at 9:45pm

Maverick4

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Michigan lost to Penn State last night in Quadruple Overtime, just a heads up. :P

 

Posted Oct 14, '13 at 2:38am

EmperorPalpatine

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@Sal
I get the "crumbling" part, but where are the "walls"?

 

Posted Oct 15, '13 at 7:13pm

Salvidian

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@Sal
I get the "crumbling" part, but where are the "walls"?

"Walls of silence" has always been a favorite phrase of mine. I don't know if anyone will understand it except me, so I take pleasure in knowing something you don't. It's one of my many methods to madness.

 

Posted Oct 15, '13 at 7:31pm

Salvidian

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For reference, because I'm nice:

TOOL LYRICS

"Cold And Ugly"

“Throw that Bob Marley wanna-be mother****er outta here”

FADE

Underneath the skin and jewelry,
hidden in her words and eyes
is a wall that's cold and ugly
and she's scared as hell.
Trembling at the thought of feeling.
Wide awake and keeping distance.
Nothing seems to penetrate her.
cause She's scared as hell.

I am frightened too
I am frightened
Oh oh oh.

Trembling at the thought of feeling
Wide awake and keeping distance
Nothing seems to penetrate her.
cause She's scared as hell.

I am frightened too
I am frightened

Wide awake and
keeping distance from my soul.
Wide awake and
keeping distance from my soul

FADE

Underneath the skin and jewelry,
hidden in her words and eyes
is a wall that's cold and ugly
and she's scared as hell.
Trembling at the thought of feeling.
Wide awake and keeping distance.
Nothing seems to penetrate her.
cause She's scared as hell.

I am frightened too
I am frightened too
I am scared like you
I am frightened

Source

I'm not referencing to the lyrics of this song specifically. I am referencing to the concept this song portrays. And keep in mind that in no way did the phrase originate from the mind of Maynard James Keenan. He just used the phrase. If I tell you anymore, I'd probably be threatening the integrity of my hidden message.

 

Posted Oct 24, '13 at 6:28am

Reton8

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Might be too late. I'm going to enter this as free verse anyway.

Wall-falls with Syrup

These walls are crumbling into my tea.
Some got into my cake batter as well....

Mr. Gorbachev, tear down this wall!!

 
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