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Posted Mar 24, '13 at 1:29am

Salvidian

Salvidian

4,299 posts

Gotta stay away from them E's..like his assignment states =p


I should probably read the OP of threads more often. Haha, looks like I got a 4 word combo there. Ouch.
 

Posted Mar 24, '13 at 2:21am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

9,700 posts

Ok..so this isn't showing up for me..so I'm making this comment to try and resolve the issue..

 

Posted Mar 25, '13 at 10:37pm

Bladerunner679

Bladerunner679

2,534 posts

Alright, I'm back, and I'm going to give you a new piece for today. The object of this piece is to use 100 words to make an interesting short story. This 100 words includes the title, so it is really 99 available.

jealousy

John spied on his coworkers, and envied their success. He has been in the company for way longer than any of them, and has done the most work. Every year, he observed the newest members of the company write meager chicken scratch on useless reports, and then climb the ranks because they used more flattery on their supervisors than sinners who were sent to the 2nd malebolge of hell. John knew that he laboured harder than any of them, and still they mocked him with their apathy for his existence. Sullen, he swigged his whiskey, and continued mopping.


If you caught what I did there, then that is what makes this story interesting.

-Blade
 

Posted Mar 28, '13 at 5:44pm

Bladerunner679

Bladerunner679

2,534 posts

Today, I'm going to put down something that I can truly say I am proud of. I wrote a sestina, and have just finished today. the link in wikipedia will tell you the structure of the poem, but all you need to know is that each line uses a certain word, there are six of these words used for each stanza, and each stanza uses these words in different patterns. the words are:

1.dirt
2.wind
3.vision
4.sword
5.time
6.chapel

here is my attempt:

Two men stepped onto the dirt,
no sounds were made but from the wind.
Their clash was seen in a vision,
and the gods would clash with their swords.
The initial strike stopped time;
the ritual begins in the unholy chapel.

Every great clash began in this chapel,
within unseen walls and blood-stained dirt.
This has been since the beginning of time;
the only witness was the wind.
The two warriors raised their swords,
time to continue the bloody vision.

Immediately, one warrior lost his vision,
but that didn't appease the unholy chapel.
This blind warrior swung his sword,
but it only hit the blood-stained dirt.
Focused, he caught his opponent's breath on the wind,
and managed to hit a 2nd time.

Wounded, the opponent's senses stopped his time,
and tried to find exploitable weaknesses in his vision.
Calmly, he noticed the warrior turn from the wind;
he knew to exploit this would appease the chapel.
Swiftly, he darted forward and kicked up dirt
to hide his position while he aimed his sword.

The warrior heard him, and lifted his sword
to block the killing blow just in time.
He ran outside of the shroud of dirt,
in order to exploit the opponent's lack of vision.
The warrior felt the bloodlust in the chapel,
and could smell the hunger in the wind.

From each came a flurry of strikes that broke the wind;
from each came sparks along each sword.
From each came the hunger of the chapel,
but neither could feel the passing of time.
One saw the strike too late in his vision,
and one finally rested upon the dirt.

The shroud of dirt subsided with the wind;
the survivor's vision spotted the broken sword.
The resuming of time finally dissolved the appeased chapel.


tell me what you think of it.

-Blade
 

Posted Apr 5, '13 at 10:46am

Blackbeltr0

Blackbeltr0

802 posts

Immediately, one warrior lost his vision,
but that didn't appease the unholy chapel.
This blind warrior swung his sword,
but it only hit the blood-stained dirt.
Focused, he caught his opponent's breath on the wind,
and managed to hit a 2nd time.



I like this paragraph. It brings out images. one thing quick. I would say when you write don't use abbreviations like 2nd it just kind kills the flow just right the word. :D otherwise i think the "fight" is cool! :D
 
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