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[REQ]The Lyceum: Official Contest - Page One

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Posted Apr 23, '13 at 4:56pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

4,299 posts

I'll judge tomorrow if Emp doesn't do it anytime today.

 

Posted Apr 24, '13 at 1:15pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

9,436 posts

You go ahead. I got stuff again.

 

Posted Apr 28, '13 at 1:52am

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

9,436 posts

It's late enough as it is, Sal's busy with a serious personal matter, so here's a quick judging:

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HahiHa (can't win)

Strong, direct, and precise word choice. Impeccable imagery. I'm a sucker for repetitive s's, so "standing amidst a sea of swaying reeds" was a serious strength. Would've won if you didn't last round.

Minor error(s): suns to sun's

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Hectichermit

I like the cyclical-based theme. When the fun's over, everything patiently prepares for it to start again. But the rhymes seemed a bit forced at times. The structure is odd, as sometimes the next line will be continuing from the prior, and sometimes not. Some visual distinction, be it by punctuation or space, would be nice.

Minor error(s): blossoms to blossom's; summers to summer's

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rychus


'Tis an adventurous riddle. Simple, light, clean, flitting. But the middle line seems disjointed, out of place, fragmenting the flow.


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Quirinus1 (can't win)


As expected, lots of alliteration, consistant style. A good concept of spring being a fresh start, a peaceful time for the mentally turbulent, gently guiding them to absolution.


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StormWalker


I like the balance of starting with outside and ending with inside. I can appreciate the irony of how golden things are usually appealing, desired, yet in this case you hide away from it.

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StormWalker

pang will take over.

 

Posted Apr 28, '13 at 2:52am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

9,698 posts

Alright everyone...after discussing it over with my fellow founders, this thread is to be locked. Don't fret, however, for The Lyceum shall live on!

I will explain this all in full details in the new thread after this one becomes locked..until then, I leave you with suspense!

[note: If you would like to join, message one of us founders and let us know. Now is the last chance for an "easy entrance", as the requirements to become a member will change significantly when the new thread comes out]