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inferedmonkey
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Hey guys! My favortie form of art has always been film, and I just finished making a "Short film", so I was wondering if you guys could tell me what you thought about it! Tell me if there's anything I could do better next time! thanks!

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09philj
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I agree with Matt, it would have been better with no dialogue. Apart from that, it really is funny, and the music really fits.

MrDayCee
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It was quite amusing to watch! Where 2 fight, the third one gets 'the prize'...

I have to agree though that the glasses weren't necessary and came across as plain odd within the entire setting. Leaving the dialogue out of it would have made it a complete story, because the actions in there speak for themselves.

Good job! You should be proud! =)

inferedmonkey
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Thanks you guys for all the positive feed back! its really appreciated! As far as the dialogue goes I wouldn't have included it, but this was a high school project and one of my partners insisted it was in there.

Matt, Thanks for the tip about copyrights, I went ahead and put the information in there! As for the fight scene you posted, I would have loved to do something like that, but working with high school "actors" that have never really acted a day in thier lives, that might have been a little ambitious Again thank you guys for the positive feed back!

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