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hey guys i wrote a new song and i just wanted to know if its good.so please read and rate.

Sometimes

Some things i cannot just explain.
They make me wanna complain.
To everything,for everything.
Somehow i try to make it up.
But then it all screws up again.
Everytime,all the time.

And i wish you could understand.
But no!You canât!

(chorus)
Sometimes i think youâre sick of me.
Sometimes i feel like falling from everything.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).
And sometimes i think youre bored with me.
Sometimes i think that you canât feel.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).

This fact can make me wanna cry.
I feel like i could just die.
Just right now,right now.
But then i think it is a lie.
So now to calm down i try.
Itâs so hard,very hard!

And i wish you could understand.
But no!You canât!

(chorus)
Sometimes i think youâre sick of me.
Sometimes i feel like falling from everything.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).
And sometimes i think youre bored with me.
Sometimes i think that you canât feel.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).

Sometimes i wanna scream(wanna scream)!
I just wanna leave!

(chorus)x2
Sometimes i think youâre sick of me.
Sometimes i feel like falling from everything.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).
And sometimes i think youre bored with me.
Sometimes i think that you canât feel.
Just like iâm a piece of toast(a piece of toast).

Just like iâm a piece of toast.

It is my first song and i wrote it at 1 oâ clock in the morning yesterday so rate fairly!