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made a song

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 2:18am

AAA

AAA

140 posts

Every one i made this song i hope you like it



its called "Behind Bars"

(Intro)
I am behind bars for somthing i didnt do. i feel depressed i was framed man no one belevies me


Chorus x2

Its just another day Behind Bars
just anotha day
what can say
from september to may
a bunch of years.... behind bars
behind bars
behind bars
behind bars
behind bars
behind....bars
(Verse1)

I am goige to be here til i die
dats no lie
it makes me want to cry
i fell like i am goige to die
the worlds hates me why
i am just sitting here with a sigh
behind bars
with a bunch of scars
emotionoly
i am inoccent dont you see

(Chorusx2)

(Verse2)

Im doing time
i didnt do no crime
im sitting in my sell hearinf the rain
and i am fealing pain
it was a frame
i didt hurt any one
dont you belive me


(Chorusx2)

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 2:32am

crimsonblade55

crimsonblade55

5,718 posts

It could use a spell check, but I like it.One thing I found about it though is that it feels kinda short.

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 2:35am

MarkedTarget6

MarkedTarget6

1,768 posts

teh behind bars part is kinda TOO pepitive for one at a time but overall it was good but short

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 2:35am

MarkedTarget6

MarkedTarget6

1,768 posts

i meant repitive not pepitive

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 2:39am

RaptorExx

RaptorExx

2,330 posts

repetative? or is that actually pepitive?
Anyways, I sorta got a happy musical background, like a Mr. Rogers Neighborhood, very similar actually, when reading the song...how weird.

Although I know it's not supposed to be like that, unless it was, but it's a good song, the 'behind bars' is a little repatative, my Mr. Rogers Version would've been good with 3 or 4(Chorus: Line 5-7) so it kinda messed it up a little in the beginning, unless that was a fade away type thing, then I think it would work. So yeah, good one there.

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 3:57am

crazynaitor

crazynaitor

2,959 posts

It is like too repitive but I give it 7/10

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 4:12am

Danstanta

Danstanta

1,786 posts

Are you a singer ? :D You sure sound like one, Great work!

 

Posted Jul 31, '08 at 10:59am

hitmanvp95

hitmanvp95

1,139 posts

cool!!!!i give it 8/10!!!nice work!!!

 
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