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Posted Aug 4, '08 at 1:45am

NoNameC68

NoNameC68

5,070 posts

Knight

Bright Light Shadow

Bright light shadow penetrates prosperous sands of time,
Dark shaded lights dance upon the tomb, sublime.
The stars to far, from which we can reach,
The heavens, right here, which we can't breach.

The lion's body lies to guard the god's tower,
The face of man, watching over hidden powers.
We see not the blessed life of our right-doing,
But the wrath of the lords, growing and brewing.

The answers of secrets, right in front of our eyes,
What we make of these treasures become pure lies.
The answers we seek right in our views,
Are nothing more than dreams, never true.

God, gods, or Buda, we can never agree,
Without them, would we finally be free?
With no reason for war, would we sleep tight?
With nothing to look too would we make it through night?

The meaning of words in which I speak,
The meaning within them run so deep.
The truth be told within these rhymes,
Truly mean nothing, no more than chimes.

Tell me what you picture and what you think about the poem. You can try to figure out it's meaning but don't ask me, I am just the guy who wrote the poem... how would I know?

 

Posted Aug 4, '08 at 4:57pm

Estel

Estel

1,991 posts

Knight

Of course I love oxymorons in a title XP

You spelled Buddha wrong, lol.

Anyway, the message is somewhat various if you look deep in the writings. I can see a theme of something being so close, yet so far away, but that's more of a cliche. Then I see something of treasuring anything too much becomes just sand to us.

Then there's the religion aspect. If there was no religion, would everything be peaceful? i think not, but that could differ from other opinions.

Overall, a great poem, keep up the great work!

 

Posted Aug 4, '08 at 5:06pm

crazynaitor

crazynaitor

2,536 posts

This is an awesome poem NoName keep it up I hope you make more great poems.

 

Posted Aug 5, '08 at 9:58am

NoNameC68

NoNameC68

5,070 posts

Knight

Someday I am going to find most of the things I submitted within here and place all my works in one thread. I think I might try to come up with a few more new poems before I gather everything together.

 

Posted Aug 5, '08 at 11:34am

Estel

Estel

1,991 posts

Knight

I think you should add to this one. It's really good, but if I'm going to make a song out of this, it needs to be longer! :P

 

Posted Aug 5, '08 at 5:35pm

NoNameC68

NoNameC68

5,070 posts

Knight

I would rather you not make a song out of this one untill I see how the other song your suposed to be working on turns out. = )

 

Posted Aug 6, '08 at 4:24pm

Arax_Nisanu

Arax_Nisanu

1,343 posts

I personally really like this poem! Really well written NNC68.