Alright Skel, this is your last judging, so make it count...
A few notes before I begin the judging... since this round was filled with confusion and chaos, I'm disappointed to report that only three entries actually qualified for placement this round. So before I get into those, I'll mention the entries that weren't eligible for the contest...
killersup10:
I sincerely apologize for not seeing this much earlier, but Independence was last round's theme! However, you still ought to know that meter is important if you want the poem to rhyme and flow well! Take these two lines for example...
independence is a lie
they just want us all to die
Both lines rhyme, and both have an equal number of syllables, so the rhyme flows nicely. In these two lines, however...
i can see through their crap
i can even turn it into a rap
It jumps from 6 syllables on one line to 10 on the next! Sure it rhymes, but reading it is just... awkward!
samiel:
From what you noted after posting the poem, this was not intentionally submitted for this contest... which makes sense, because it's not really relevant to the theme anyway! One thing I will say, though, is that line 6 seems a bit awkward in the sense that it, judging by the way the poem is laid out and how the rhyme scheme and general meter are set up, it should end in a word ending in "-ender" instead of breaking away from the rest of the poem.
bobawesome:
It sounds like something out of a children's poetry book... I like it! But remember, deadlines are there for a reason! The deadline was Friday, so it's a day too late. Sorry! Great entry though, I love the festive juvenile rhymes! Keep writing poetry!
Whew... got a bit carried away there with those disqualified entries. All that aside, I give you the three entries that actually qualified for placement!
3rd Place: CheapCheep!
It's short, but it's not bad! Sounds like old song lyrics. The vocabulary is simplistic, and there are only three lines so there is a lot of room for improvement in both those fields... but hey, there were only three this round so by default you placed! =)
2nd Place: goumas13!
Interesting... it had a post-19th century feel to it! The ending seemed a bit abrupt, though, and it felt like quite a bit more could be added to it... 13 short lines and not much relevance to the theme, this poem would have had a shot at first had it been reasonably longer and more elaborated!
The unquestionable 1st-place winner: wolf1991!
You captured the theme very well! Much more solidly than either of the other entries! I thought it was interesting how you jumped from one rhyme/meter scheme to another and then back again! It did feel a bit awkward, though, in the middle when you switched from one rhyme scheme to blank verse to a different rhyme scheme... that did kill a fair amount of the preexisting flow. But you still won nonetheless, so congratulations!
Even though I'm not going to be judging this next round, I'm going to at least start things off by choosing The Solar System as the next theme and setting the deadline to Wednesday, August 8 unless there are any objections...
Au revoir!