Forums → Art, Music, and Writing → Periodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)
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First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.
Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:
It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).
Also:
The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted
As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.
OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
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The deadline is today. Judging will be tomorrow or Wednesday.
Seriously, asking about the judging before submissions are closed is weak, lol =.=
Anyway, submissions will close at 10:00 AG time. So for you procrastinators, you have almost four hours to get an entry in~!
My attempt at avant-garde, telling a story, and stealth.
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SO i am guessing it is tonight.. Lets hope I am home tonight!
Haha, now guize, sorry again, but more stuff's come up. I will judge Friday with 100% certainty. This has just been a busy week for me. But as usual, friday night is sacred.
Sorry for the late judging - as I've said, I'v ebeen very busy lately. But now, I'm fine and can judge.
Due to less entries, I'll judge one runner up, second place, and first.
EnterOrion - A Mile Away
I kill you from a mile off,
I make you dead before the sound even comes,
I laugh as you fall down with a blood sputtered cough.
With a crack from to sky, the bodies fall down,
Each one gone with a half inch of lead,
Laughing as I blow off their crown.
Left for naught but to die again and again,
A snipers bullet shall shred through thee,
So short and quick you don't feel the pain.
And it drives you insane.
Death from a mile, you don't see a flash,
As your bodies splits with a violent crash.
It takes two seconds to reach you with my fingers of God,
It takes two seconds to wipe out your squad.
Roll in the dust before you're snuffed out,
This is what you get for being a lout.
Fifty caliber rounds with smash through your head,
Shortly the rest of you will end up dead.
I invade your dreams in the predawn hours,
Filling you with terror and take what's ours.
You will never see me, for I am death,
Silently smiling as you take your last breath.
It's time to die for the final time,
Your life to me isn't worth a dime.
Your meter is kinda all over the place here - if you even it out some, it'll be a great poem. But the meter is significantly limiting here - there isn't really a distinct flow or lack thereof. Your rhyming is interesting and gtood, though. I have the most problem with lines 2 and 3 of stanza 1, and line 3 of stanza 4. They're over-inflated, and if you deflate them some, you'll have a winning poem on your hands.
AND PLACING IMPRESSIVELY IN 2ND FOR A FIRST ENTRY, WE HAVE LILDOOTSEVENTYSEVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEN
LilDoot77 - On the Run
The silence is deafening.
A foot-fall,
a snapped branch.
They're coming.
I run through the trees.
They can't catch me.
Weaving in and out of the undergrowth.
Now I'm lost.
The darkness,
blackens every corner of the forest.
I learn to adapt.
Sneaking up on my prey.
My former pursuers rest.
Not for long.
My feet never make a sound.
The prisoners rest.
I jump from a tree,
Stealing their food.
They will never expect it.
But they know it was me...
This poem has a relatively even meter and a good atmosphere to it. I really enjoyed reading it. The 3rd line of the 2nd stanza is sticking out some, and while it evens out later in the poem, it doesn't sit well when you first go over it. This poem is very simple, but at the same time profound in its poignancy. It really has a lot of facets to it. It was extremely close to beating out our winner, the one and only MOOOOOONFAIIIIIRYYYYYYYYY
MoonFairy - Shadow Conductor
You won't see them coming.
You won't hear them run.
You won't see them hiding.
Cause if you do your life is done.
Stealth is their name
Killing is their game.
If you are who they are after,
Your cries will die in my laughter.
Because I tell them who to kill.
I send them after you.
I am the boss of them all.
I am the master of the skill.
They are my ninjas.
And they are hiding in plain sight.
They will come after you.
Be it day or night.
So when you see a flash of black.
You might have a shuriken in your back.
Or when you hear my call
Onto your knees, you will fall.
This poem is really great. The first stanza is perfect except for one or two extra syllables on the last line, and the rest of it is even meter-wise. The poem has a simple, yet sinister atmosphere, like the menacing shadow of a secretive office. It really harmonized with the theme in a great way. And that's why you can contact any mod with your merit.
New Theme: Ocean
DEadline: Friday, May 7
I was a shark.
Commandeering the sea,
Beneath my trademark,
Ol' Jolly Roger's lee.
Legions facing me, conceited.
Prodigious empires of the world
One by one they were deleted.
Olympus and Valhalla dirled.
Deities heretofore plighted.
Poseidon, Neptune, a pity.
My quondam ally sighted.
Attesting the enmity.
Plunge..
Immersed...
Grunge..
Cursed...
Redeeming Homacanth.
Lucidity attained,
Unseeing Amaranth.
Oblivion did wane.
As foretold,
The Kobold,
Plead behold,
Depth untold.
My soul oust,
I'm bound to Lir.
Apathetic'ly dowst.
I obliged to incur.
Now I only see,
Detrimentally.
I have become me.
SAWEET! WOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am really suprised I got first! Alot of the others were GREAT. THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU. And I wll post my Oceanic poem soon.
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