ForumsArt, Music, and WritingPeriodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)

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First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.

Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:

It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).


Also:

The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted

As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.


OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
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And for the winners:

First Place: IqAndreas!
To be honest, your poem made me cry... you win! Haha.

For this week, we have a TIE for second place:

Shayneii and Shark7996

Shayneii, I loved the story! It was wonderful and really well thought out.

Shark... what can I say, that was hilarious! I loved the rhyme, meter, and really everything about it.

Everyone did a magnificent job these last two weeks, I really had my hands full with this one. Keep up the great work!!

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Congratuations to all the winners, all of your poems were excellently written.

School, huh? I guess I'm going to have to put my thinking cap on. Hmmmmmm.....

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I can't rhyme, so this may not be that good

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School
mentorso123

Time
on a clock
on a phone
on a watch

watch the time

teacher
talks
explains
asks

watch the teacher

student
bothers
asks
explains
nope,
not me
i don't bother
to bother
during class

watch out

there's no time like lunch time
line
out the door
you know what,
I may just wait outside
okay

watch the clock
and the line

go back
buy food
eat food
talk
walk
talk

watch the time
and your step

class
once more
resume
resume
any other big words?
okay,
it's english class
i wont ask.

watch the time
and the teacher

class ends
teacher talks
"Time to go"
teacher glares
teacher stares

watch the time
and for the bus
even though it's not
even 2 o clock

school
is random
annoying
boring
interesting
painful
tearful

and yes

even

fun

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Aww...man...D: I SOOOO thought I'd win this one! I WILL PWN THIS WEEK!!!

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To be honest, your poem made me cry.


Hmm...I think I should get this girl I know to judge then....my poems always make her cry...

Hmmm...School eh?...

I might do one tomorrow after school...and look for elements then!

KingRyan
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I don't think I'll even try any more poems. I just have a very thick mind.

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School, a sanctuary or a cell?


She walks down the hall, eyes open wide
Moving her head side to side
Watching, waiting, hoping in vain
Then as expected, in a flash
A hand pushed her books form her hands
They tumble to the floor, and land with a thump
They laughter behind her, goes louder each day
But her mind blocks it out and
Her thoughts pull her away
Everyday is the same, no different, no change
The only think that keeps her, from going insane
Is the dream she hides away, unseen
The bullies walk away, moving on to other games
A single tear runs down her cheek
Her thoughts swirl inside her head
Why me, not them? Why do they cause me such dread?
She lets her thoughts change to
The things she must do that day
She walks into class, and sees the bullies snicker
Something inside her breaks
The only thing that was keeping her at bay
She raises her fist and say "hay, don't just sit there
Lets play" the mock in her voice was clearly heard
And the others were silence by the change in her
Then one got up and laughed an said
"You don't have a chance"
The girl just smiled, she saw the fear in the other girls eyes
The same thing that she used to see,
When she looked in the mirror everyday.
Suddenly the teacher came,
She screeched, yelled, scream
The girls both stopped, dropped the evil gaze
And both walked away.
Nothing happened on that day
That would seem to change anything
But sense that day, she never again
Was bothered by them
See its not that she was stronger, or that she was even taller
It was that she had courage, to stand up and fight
Most bullies at school want an easy victim
But if you show them you're mind is strong, and your not afraid
Then they wont bother, to bug you every day
Remember these words, keep them in mind
Next time you hear nasty words from a peer.


Ok, thats mine, sorry if you find that it doesnt apply. Its just my thoughts in poem form.... And sorry this is the real one not messed up, this is the one i want you to judge.

shayneii
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Wow adrecka... that was actually pretty touching! Good job!

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It is the first day of school
I don't know why they are so cruel
They bring us back, year after year
Sometimes they drag us by ear

We sit in our classes, good as can be
What does it get us? More words to see
The bell rings, on to the next class
I hope you studied, we might not pass

It's time for our lunch
We all sit in a bunch
They serve us this slop
It makes me want to plop
It looks like moldy cheese
Don't make me eat it, please!

On to 5th hour
This class is quite sour
They make us take note after note
We take enough notes to sink a boat
This good go on and on
The bell rings like a gong!

I've got two periods to go
Oh boy! It looks like it might snow
I'll go home and grab my sled
Then my mom will whack me, square on the head

Yes! School is out!
It makes me want to scream and shout!
Woo-hoo! Alright!
You comin' to my house tonight?

I got home and played with glee
Now I have homework, Oh gee
Off to bed
Lay down my head
Only to start over the next day

adrecka_33
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gman1000 that is like totally school life right there, very good!

gman1000
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Wow, thank you. I just came up with it on the spot. Your's is good too.

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Thank you i did it pretty quick, anyways do you know how long this one lasts tell? last time it was two weeks but that was because it was epic right? i dont know and i dont think dragon mistress said......

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Sep 15, '08 at 8:36pm, adrecka_33 wrote:
Thank you i did it pretty quick, anyways do you know how long this one lasts tell? last time it was two weeks but that was because it was epic right? i dont know and i dont think dragon mistress said......


Default is a week ending on Saturday.


A Kinder Garden for the Mind

Listen here as I tell you, Son
About the time when school was fun:
The day was filled with fun and play
And that was what we did all day.

We made our friends, we got along.
No one ever was really wrong
And if we'd ever have a fight,
In the end we'd make it all right.

They'd hang our art upon the wall,
The good and bad, but best of all,
They'd hand out snacks to eat in class.
Then we'd go out, play on the grass.

They're the best days there are, Son.
Such days were filled with play and fun
'fore the days they make you smarten.
You'll have fun in Kindergarten.
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adrecka that is awesome.
anyway

classroom
by lytnin

sit straight
look sharp
tuck in your shirt
pull your tie up
get rid of that chewing gum
the same commands babbling on and on
the teacher speaks but the words dont come out
she stands
looking through those beady eyes
and small mean glasses.
look up
watch
clock
watch the clock
tick tock
nearly there.
sunlight taps on the window
trying to reach the musty room
no, were sealed off
goodbye world
only 15 more minutes.
come on
tick tock.
when will it end.

yeh its not supposed to rhyme or even make sense hardlys, i wanted to make it represent how in school you get so bored you kinda lose your trail of thought.. lol... i think adrecka won though :O

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