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First of all, I shall tell you that I have no idea why I wrote this. I was just bored, and added random stuff. And remember, this story has barely started! I'm still working.

THE MENACE

Prologue
Slimy Ooze trickled across the hard paved surface. Bubbles popped from the green liquid, and hardened on the floor. Damp, musty smells rose from the walls. In the middle of the mess stood a pimp, tall man who wore glasses. He looked like he was in the mid-30s, his hair was curled, he had a short, stout face, and he looked lean and strong, but he smelled like rotten radishes. He was wearing a worn-out lab coat, and seemed to be studying too odd-shaped glass bottles with a weird fluid in them. After a few minutes, he put the bottle down and clapped his hands, causing a dust cloud to form above him. He coughed, and then picked up two new glass bottles with more fluids in them to study. Finally he mixed some of the fluids and it started to bubbleâ¦and shake, as if something inside was struggling. The shaking grew more and more intense, rocking the table with each swaying motion. Above the midst of all this voice, a deep evil laughter could be heard. The scientist shouted, âSoon the world will be mine! Mu-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha!â The rocking intensified even more, until the glass started to crack. Suddenly, it exploded, showering ooze all over the place. The light bulb above flickered, and went out. Then, everything was black. Everything.

Chapter 1
âDing, ding, ding!â The bell rang to signal the end of school and the start of summer. The kids got up from their desks, and raced outside. Among the huge throng of kids were 14-year old Jake Albert and his friends Jordan Jackson and Jay Panini. Right after they got out of school grounds, the group of friends headed for Jakeâs house for some ice cream and to make plans for the summer.

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firetail_madness
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Dang, what's with those symbols?

Their supposed to be different punctuation like quotation marks, apostrophes etc.

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loli understand the story but not the square stuffs they all mean letters but there like almost the exact same thing so whats the difference OMG that language is weird!!!

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Good one! Better than all mine.


I don't believe that...
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Well, I'm only starting on chapter 1, I better get to work...

gman1000
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Could I help with the story? I'm bored.

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What exactly do you mean gman1000?

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I have absolutely no idea. I'm out of my mind today... BALUGA WHALE!

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BALUGA WHALE!


Beluga whale? Huh? What the heck are you talking about?!
firetail_madness
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Well, don't start spamming my thread please.

gman1000
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I told you I'm C-R-A-Z-Y!

gman1000
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I'm sorry. I wasn't trying to spam, but explain why my post is weird (did I spell that right?)

Anyway, I think the chapters should be MUCH longer.

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Um, hello.

I barely started on the first chapter. I added more, btw.

Prologue
Slimy Ooze trickled across the hard paved surface. Bubbles popped from the green liquid, and hardened on the floor. Damp, musty smells rose from the walls. In the middle of the mess stood a pimp, tall man who wore glasses. He looked like he was in the mid-30s, his hair was curled, he had a short, stout face, and he looked lean and strong, but he smelled like rotten radishes. He was wearing a worn-out lab coat, and seemed to be studying too odd-shaped glass bottles with a weird fluid in them. After a few minutes, he put the bottle down and clapped his hands, causing a dust cloud to form above him. He coughed, and then picked up two new glass bottles with more fluids in them to study. Finally he mixed some of the fluids and it started to bubbleâ¦and shake, as if something inside was struggling. The shaking grew more and more intense, rocking the table with each swaying motion. Above the midst of all this voice, a deep evil laughter could be heard. The scientist shouted, âSoon the world will be mine! Mu-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha!â The rocking intensified even more, until the glass started to crack. Suddenly, it exploded, showering ooze all over the place. The light bulb above flickered, and went out. Then, everything was black. Everything.

Chapter 1
âDing, ding, ding!â The bell rang to signal the end of school and the start of summer. The kids got up from their desks, and raced outside. Among the huge throng of kids were 14-year old Jake Albert and his friends Jordan Jackson and Jay Panini. Right after they got out of school grounds, the group of friends headed for Jakeâs house for some ice cream and to make plans for the summer. When they got to the house, Jake groaned.
âI forgot my keys in my locker at school!â, he said. He quickly ran back in the direction of the school with his friends hot on his heels. When he got near school grounds, he groaned again. The fence gates were closed and locked. But he couldnât just wait until his parents got home and opened the doors for him because he forgot the keys. Plus, somebody might steal them if they staid there for the whole summer. He jumped over the gate and landed on his feet on the other side. Jay quickly followed him but Jordan staid at the gates, unsure.
âAre you sure this is a good idea?â, Jordan asked.
âNot to worry, we wonât get caught or anything. I bet all the teachers went home already. Plus, weâll lie low.â, Jake answered. But Jordan still wasnât convinced.
âIâll wait for you hereâ, Jordan said.

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I'm really beginning to hate symbols.

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Well, the prolouge was VERY short.

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It's the prologue. Hello!

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