Gosh! This is pretty good...one of the better stories I've seen on armorgames. although there is some corrections and suggestions:
Only when the will of man is cast into the unfurling darkness of the unknown, where society is absent and the only constant is the will to live can we truly survive.
- there needs to be a comma between 'live' and 'can'
He was a young man in his mid twenties but looked considerably older. He was very pale due...
- instead of just blandly stating how his appearance was, you could mix it in with the story...you know what i mean right?...
And also the God thing, as Aquajag mentioned, throws off the flow.
And that's all I got :D
Can't wait for next installment :)
