I was running down the street, I saw a bird tweak, I wondered what will happen, if everyone be like this, the angels wings will be flapping, "Oh what i beautiful creature" i thought, "thank you god for what you brought" i love you for the life you gave to me, I love you for my family......
It's a good start. If you intend on polishing it, I think you should make the train of thought a little more connected. There are little gaps in the poem that prevent it from reaching its full potential.
