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I was walking (nowhere in particular, just for relaxation) the other day, and this verse popped into my head. If you've looked at my profile, you know that I am an amature writer. Please tell me if you think it is any good. (btw, this is not supposed to be religious in any way, even though it sounds like it might be)


And the Man gazed out apon the World,
Posing to himself the question;
"What do I desire most in this life?"

And as the World gazed back at him, in it's serene beauty, he knew.

The Man spoke:

Give me my memories of Yesterday.

Give me my choices of Today.

Give me my hopes of Tomorrow.


I am at peace.

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ubertuna
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You know what... I'm gonna put that up in my bio. Maybe. Hmmm....

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wow. Your writing is great! sounds good to me. And, ya, i can see how it related to religion...just a tad. But thats good.

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Thanks, I am a big fan of [/url=http://www.neilgaiman.com/]Neil Gaiman[/url]. If you like what I have done you should check him out.

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whoops, that didn't work.


Neil Gaiman

ubertuna
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I'm just posting here so that this gets brought back up to the top, I would like to get more people to respond to it so that I can get a better idea of whether or not it is any good.

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Ya some nic ewriting but whats it trying to refer too?

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It refers to a transcendental appreciation of life!

You could make that a koan of sorts, actually. As Switchfoot says, there's a certain spiritual aesthetic to it, one that may soothe many a being's malaise.

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