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Posted Feb 29, '08 at 2:58pm

ubertuna

ubertuna

2,092 posts

Knight

I was walking (nowhere in particular, just for relaxation) the other day, and this verse popped into my head.  If you've looked at my profile, you know that I am an amature writer.  Please tell me if you think it is any good.  (btw, this is not supposed to be religious in any way, even though it sounds like it might be)

And the Man gazed out apon the World,
Posing to himself the question;
"What do I desire most in this life?"

And as the World gazed back at him, in it's serene beauty, he knew.

The Man spoke:

Give me my memories of Yesterday.

Give me my choices of Today.

Give me my hopes of Tomorrow.

I am at peace.

 

Posted Feb 29, '08 at 2:59pm

ubertuna

ubertuna

2,092 posts

Knight

You know what...   I'm gonna put that up in my bio.  Maybe.  Hmmm....

 

Posted Feb 29, '08 at 2:59pm

SwitchFoot

SwitchFoot

45 posts

wow. Your writing is great! sounds good to me. And, ya, i can see how it related to religion...just a tad. But thats good.

 

Posted Feb 29, '08 at 3:13pm

ubertuna

ubertuna

2,092 posts

Knight

Thanks, I am a big fan of [/url=http://www.neilgaiman.com/]Neil Gaiman[/url].  If you like what I have done you should check him out.

 

Posted Feb 29, '08 at 3:14pm

ubertuna

ubertuna

2,092 posts

Knight

whoops, that didn't work.

Neil Gaiman

 

Posted Mar 2, '08 at 1:46am

ubertuna

ubertuna

2,092 posts

Knight

I'm just posting here so that this gets brought back up to the top, I would like to get more people to respond to it so that I can get a better idea of whether or not it is any good.

 

Posted Apr 17, '08 at 6:21am

Spartan

Spartan

2,866 posts

Ya some nic ewriting but whats it trying to refer too?

 

Posted Apr 17, '08 at 6:26am

Strop

Strop

10,823 posts

Moderator

It refers to a transcendental appreciation of life!

You could make that a koan of sorts, actually. As Switchfoot says, there's a certain spiritual aesthetic to it, one that may soothe many a being's malaise.