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Surveyingâ¦.




âHay Daniel, how yaâ been?â I asked.

âOh Iâm good pat, what âbout you?â Said Daniel, who is also my best friend.

âIâm really good, I just found a lottery ticket on the ground and won 10 dollarsâ

âAww man you always lucky man, Maybe it will rub onto me somedayâ

âYeah someday, hehhehâ

âShut upâ¦.loser, ahhaâ

â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦

âSo what are we doing today in class?â I asked.

âOh were going around the community for that survey thingy remember, on what people think of the neighbour hoodâ

âHmmâ¦.Ohhh yeah now I rememberâ¦With Min and that Kyle guy hey?â

âYup thatâs them.â

--BBRRRRIIIIINNNNNNGGGG!!!â"

âOhh man the bells gone weâd better hurry!!!â

â5 bucks I can beat ya there Patâ

âYouâre on!â

I ran through some bushes while Daniel ran through an alleyway, after the bushes I jumped some fences and landed in some dog poop, got up cleaned my self and climbed a tree over the school fence. I couldnât see Daniel so I decided to go to class.
As I walked in all I could see was Danielâ¦with the biggest grin on his faceâ¦.

âHmm I see you wonâ¦again -sigh-â I said.

âYup sure did matey, and you owe me Another 5 dollarsâ

âI know I knowâ¦â

â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦.

Miss walked into the classroom and we all shut up except for this one kidâ¦who didnât know the meaning of shut up.

âJACOB!â She yelled, âPlease be quite for 5 minutesâ
âJust 5â¦hmmk Iâll handleâ He said.

âThankyouâ¦.Now class as you all know we will be going into groups today on an excursionâ¦Here are your teams,â

âTeam Strop is Elizibeth, Jacob, Shanon and Elijahâ

âTeam TnR is Damien, James, Kev and Tomâ

âTeam JDM is Daniel, Minerva, Patrick and Kyleâ

âUhh missâ said Min âWould you mine calling me Min instead of Minervaâ

âOff course Darlingâ

â-Cough cough- teachers pet â"cough cough-â

âShutup Jacob!â

Min then went to hit Jacob but fell out of her chair.

âAHAHAHAHA!â

âCLASS, BE QUITEâ Miss said in her sturdy, in charge voice.

Miss then went on with the teams while Min, Daniel and I talked about which areas we will be surveyingâ¦

âSo were going to the east of town, right min? I asked.

âYup thatâs right,â She answered.

âAww man thatâs where that weird guy livesâ¦â Daniel said in a sad voice.

âNo worries all we have to do is ask a few questions about the town,â I said.

âHmm allright.â


â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦.

âNow are we all ready to leave?â Asked miss.

âYes Missâ Answered the class.

âOk then lets go!â.

â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦

âSo where are we going first guys?â I asked.
âI donât know,â said min.

âDonât look at me manâ

âHey I know lets ask Kyleâ

âHEY KYLE HURRY UP AND STOP DAWDALLING!!!âYelled daniel.

âHmm? Ohh alrightâ¦â

âDo you know where were going first?â I asked.

âOh were going to that weird guys house firstâ¦..â

âWHHAAATTTT!!!IâM NOT GOING ANYWHERE NEAR THERE!!â

âOhh shutup Daniel!â Snapped min.

âHmm comeon lets go and get this over with then.â

âAlright?â

âALRIGHT,â We all answered.

â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦

We finally got to âthe weird guysâ house, it was everything the rumours said it would be, scary eerie and just plain old weird.

âBrrrr Iâm getting a major chill form this place guysâ Daniel said.

âHmm sameâ¦âI said.

âWell uhhâ¦whos gonna knock?â

âI defiantly am not,â I answered.

âOhh you wusses ill knock then..â Said min.

-knock knock knock-

âHmm no answer, I guess we donât have to go to this houseâ

âOhh yeah!â Daniel shouted.

So well all started walking back down the path until we heard a CREEEAAAKâ¦
We looked behind us and there he wasâ¦.An old man, he used a kane and seem to have a missing eye.

âOhh, hello sirâ min said.

We all walked back upto the man.

âWere here for a school survey on what people think of the town and like- -â

âOhh ok then..but come in firstâ¦.â He said,in a croaky voiceâ¦

âOhh man where in trouble nooow,â Daniel whispered to min and I.

â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦.

âSit down, make yourself at home -cough-âThe man said.

âOhh alright,â We all answered.

âUmm may I go to your bathroom?â Daniel asked.

âOhh yes ill show you the wayâ

âThanks man Iâve been busting,â

âDonât worry about it -Cough cough-â

The weird guy walked upstairs with Daniel and walked around the corner, out of our sightsâ¦

âOhh that Danielâ¦I could just hit him sometimesâ Said minâ¦

âYouâve already given him 2 broken ribs because he called you a loser, what else can you doâ¦you know what I donât wanna know,ââ¦

-TTTTTHHHHHHHUUUUUUMMMMMPPPPPP!!!-

âARRRRRRRGGGGGGGHHHHHHHH!!â

âWhat was that!?!?!â Min screamed.

âWoah man I have no ideaâ¦Wanna go have a look min?â I asked.

âOk but if something goes wrong im giving all my crap to my dog alright?â

âAlright â"sigh-â

So me and min walked upstairs we decided that I go left and sheâd go rightâ¦I walked a few paces forwardâ¦

âAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!â Min squeled, knew it was her âPatrick heâ"â

I saw what had happened, the old man was holding min and dragged her into a room with his hand over her mouthâ¦

The door locked, and I ran over to the room, I started thumping out it, and relized she wasnât comeing out so I tried to kick it down, which didnât helpâ¦I knew it was the end for minâ¦

But then I thought to myself -Daniel!- , so I ran in every room upstairs and finally found the bathroom, I walked in and saw Daniel, staked through the wall with a harpoon looking thingâ¦I started to cryâ¦

But then I remembered kyleâ¦So I ran outside of the room and went infront of the stairway and started screaming out âKyle, Klye please help!!Please!!!â

Then I saw him comingâ¦but he seemed differentâ¦He was facing the ground and started walking upstairsâ¦.then I looked at him and relized he was holding a knifeâ¦

He then looked directly at me ran upstairs and I felt a jab in a gutâ¦

After that I just blanked outâ¦.

The End?

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omg just lock this thread -.-

Ok I had this problem too. Copy paste the whole thing to notepad. And then change all double ' to a single one. And ... on word should be changed.

Hmm ill try now..

Surveyingâ¦




'Hay Daniel, how ya' been?' I asked.

'Oh I'm good pat, what 'bout you?' Said Daniel, who is also my best friend.

'I'm really good, I just found a lottery ticket on the ground and won 10 dollars'

'Aww man you always lucky man, Maybe it will rub onto me someday'

'Yeah someday, hehheh'

'Shut upâ¦.loser, ahha'
___________________________________________________________________________________________________--

'So what are we doing today in class?'I asked.

'Oh were going around the community for that survey thingy remember, on what people think of the neighbour hood'

'Hmmâ¦.Ohhh yeah now I rememberâ¦With Min and that Kyle guy hey?'

'Yup that's them.'

--BBRRRRIIIIINNNNNNGGGG!!!â"

'Ohh man the bells gone we'd better hurry!!!'

'5 bucks I can beat ya there Pat'

'You're on!'

I ran through some bushes while Daniel ran through an alleyway, after the bushes I jumped some fences and landed in some dog poop, got up cleaned my self and climbed a tree over the school fence. I couldn't see Daniel so I decided to go to class.
As I walked in all I could see was Danielâ¦with the biggest grin on his faceâ¦.

'Hmm I see you wonâ¦again -sigh-' I said.

'Yup sure did matey, and you owe me Another 5 dollars'

'I know I knowâ¦'
_______________________________________________________________________________________________

Miss walked into the classroom and we all shut up except for this one kidâ¦who didn't know the meaning of shut up.

'JACOB!' She yelled, 'Please be quite for 5 minutes'
'Just 5â¦hmmk i'll handle'He said.

'Thankyouâ¦Now class as you all know we will be going into groups today on an excursionâ¦Here are your teams,'

'Team Potts is Elizibeth, Jacob, Shanon and Elijah'

'Team TnR is Damien, James, Kev and Tom'

'Team JDM is Daniel, Minerva, Patrick and Kyle'

'Uhh miss' said Min 'Would you mine calling me Min instead of Minerva'

'Off course Darling'

'-Cough cough- teachers pet â"cough cough-'

'Shutup Jacob!'

Min then went to hit Jacob but fell out of her chair.

'AHAHAHAHA!'

'CLASS, BE QUITE'Miss said in her sturdy, in charge voice.

Miss then went on with the teams while Min, Daniel and I talked about which areas we will be surveyingâ¦

'So were going to the east of town, right min?' I asked.

'Yup that's right,' She answered.

'Aww man that's where that weird guy livesâ¦'Daniel said in a sad voice.

'No worries all we have to do is ask a few questions about the town,'I said.

'Hmm allright.'

___________________________________________________________________________________________________

'Now are we all ready to leave?'Asked miss.

'Yes Miss' Answered the class.

'Ok then lets go!'.

_____________________________________________________________________________


'So where are we going first guys?â'I asked.
'I donât know,' said min.

'Don't look at me man'

'Hey I know lets ask Kyle'

'HEY KYLE HURRY UP AND STOP DAWDALLING!!!'Yelled daniel.

'Hmm? Ohh alrightâ¦'

'Do you know where were going first?'I asked.

'Oh were going to that weird guys house firstâ¦..'

'WHHAAATTTT!!!I'M NOT GOING ANYWHERE NEAR THERE!!'

'Ohh shutup Daniel!'Snapped min.

'Hmm comeon lets go and get this over with then.'

'Alright?'

'ALRIGHT,'We all answered.

______________________________________________________________________________
We finally got to âthe weird guysâ house, it was everything the rumours said it would be, scary eerie and just plain old weird.

'Brrrr Iâm getting a major chill form this place guys'Daniel said.

'Hmm sameâ¦'I said.

'Well uhhâ¦whos gonna knock?'

'I defiantly am not,'I answered.

'Ohh you wusses ill knock then..'Said min.

-knock knock knock-

'Hmm no answer, I guess we don't have to go to this house'

'Ohh yeah!' Daniel shouted.

So well all started walking back down the path until we heard a CREEEAAAKâ¦
We looked behind us and there he wasâ¦.An old man, he used a kane and seem to have a missing eye.

'Ohh, hello sir'min said.

We all walked back upto the man.

'Were here for a school survey on what people think of the town and like-'

'Ohh ok then..but come in firstâ¦.' He said,in a croaky voiceâ¦

'Ohh man where in trouble nooow,'Daniel whispered to min and I.

________________________________________________________

'Sit down, make yourself at home -cough-'The man said.

'Ohh alright,' We all answered.

'Umm may I go to your bathroom?'Daniel asked.

'Ohh yes ill show you the way'

'Thanks man I've been busting,'

'Don't worry about it -Cough cough-'

The weird guy walked upstairs with Daniel and walked around the corner, out of our sightsâ¦

'Ohh that Danielâ¦I could just hit him sometimes'Said minâ¦

'You've already given him 2 broken ribs because he called you a loser, what else can you doâ¦you know what I donât wanna know,'â¦

-TTTTTHHHHHHHUUUUUUMMMMMPPPPPP!!!-

'ARRRRRRRGGGGGGGHHHHHHHH!'

'What was that!?!?!'Min screamed.

'Woah man I have no ideaâ¦Wanna go have a look min?' I asked.

'Ok but if something goes wrong im giving all my crap to my dog alright?'

'Alright â"sigh-'

So me and min walked upstairs we decided that I go left and sheâd go rightâ¦I walked a few paces forwardâ¦

'AAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!' Min squeled,I knew it was her 'Patrick heâ"'

I saw what had happened, the old man was holding min and dragged her into a room with his hand over her mouthâ¦

The door locked, and I ran over to the room, I started thumping out it, and relized she wasn't comeing out so I tried to kick it down, which didnât helpâ¦I knew it was the end for minâ¦

But then I thought to myself -Daniel!- , so I ran in every room upstairs and finally found the bathroom, I walked in and saw Daniel, staked to the wall with a harpoon looking thingâ¦I started to cryâ¦

But then I remembered kyleâ¦So I ran outside of the room and went infront of the stairway and started screaming out 'Kyle, Klye please help!!Please!!!'

Then I saw him comingâ¦but he seemed differentâ¦He was facing the ground and started walking upstairsâ¦.then I looked at him and relized he was holding a knifeâ¦

He then looked directly at me ran upstairs and I felt a jab in my gutâ¦

After that I just blanked outâ¦

The End?

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