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Fabian's Soul: The Unwanted and Lonely

Posted Nov 7, '09 at 10:49pm

nichodemus

nichodemus

3,265 posts

Iron - Prince

Perhaps when I feel like it, I will write KOA, but no, not now.

 

Posted Nov 8, '09 at 2:10am

nichodemus

nichodemus

3,265 posts

Iron - Prince

Based again partially on true events :3

When you finish reading, you'll realise it isn't so sad, it's not about a breakup for one. And it barely skims the them I think.

I Miss You In This Old House

I wonder how I'm supposed to feel,
When you're gone from my life,
Lock the house, it's a prison seal,
This place reeks of burning strife.

No there's nothing to say for salvation,
Tap tap this house grows old,
Torn wallpaper and wilted carnations,
And when I left you took my soul.

Cars roam the dusty highway,
Clouds flit by, it's a silent picture,
You call everyday and I said it's okay,
But all I think about is my departure.

Empty dark windows mirror my eyes,
But the time is ticking slow,
As I gaze at the orange gold skies,
I see the fireflies' ambient glow.

The shift is almost over this time,
The plane ticket's already in the drawer,
Tattered rag wiping up the grime,
Cold drops from the broken shower.

It's a hollow house I stay in,
The wooden floorboards creak sadly,
Brown curtains flapping in the wind,
I still need you so badly.

Two years and they'll let me go,
Now the finals grains in my hourglass fall,
As I observed the falling snow,
Cardboard boxes are lined in the hall.

And I'll be back before long love,
I feel a stinging cold numbness,
Sitting by this lonely warm hearth,
You know love is my biggest weakness.

The dawn of the day is breaking,
Finally because I miss you honey,
Keys in hand, my door is locking,
Light floods in the house, it's sunny.

 

Posted Nov 13, '09 at 11:34pm

thisisnotanalt

thisisnotanalt

6,154 posts

Wood - Queen

You still need to work on meter a bit, but you're getting better, honing the art of rhythm.

 
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