Forums → Art, Music, and Writing → WarTank's Song Book

As a few of you may know, I've formed a band with the_manta. I am a pianist, singer, and an aspiring songwriter. I try write a song just about every month...but in reality the lyrics to my songs only take a couple of hours to write, so i could write more often.
I would like to share the songs i write with AG in hopes that i will be able to get advice, criticism, and new ideas. I hope that your opinions will help me to expand my song writing talents.
Right now, I only have the lyrics to two songs completed. I'll post one now, and post the other sometime later.

This first one was actually the first song i completed. It was about a girl at school that i obviously liked...maybe a little too much. Anyway, here it is.

Everything:

You're standing there,
So perfectly,
Your long brown hair,
You're all I see.

And Later On,
Out in the Breeze,
I see you smile,
And I just freeze.

Is it possible to be so beautiful,
When I see you all the angels sing,
You're so cute and sweet and you're never dull,
And to me you're everything.
Yeah.

You're simply everything to me,
I wonder if you ever think of me,
When I hear you calling,
It feels like I'm falling,

Cause you're simply everything I know,
I wonder if I ever made it show,
The sound of your laughter,
You're the one I'm after,
Cause you're everything.

When you speak to me,
The way you make me feel,
Everything you say,
It's just so unreal.

Your hazel eyes,
Like rising suns,
In sunny skies,
Yeah you're the one.

Is it possible to be so beautiful,
Angels tell me that you're everything,
You're so cute and sweet and you're never dull,
And it's you, you make me sing,
Yeah.

You're simply everything to me,
I wonder if you ever think of me,
When I hear you calling,
It feels like I'm falling,

Cause you're simply everything I know,
I wonder if I ever made it show,
The sound of you're laughter,
You're the one I'm after,
Cause you're everything,

You're everything,
Yeah you're everything,
You're everything,
And it's you, you make me sing,

Cause you're simply everything to me,
Just the thought of you sets my soul free,
All these feeling for you,
How could I ignore you?

Cause you're simply everything I know,
I'd follow you wherever you may go,
The way that you daze me,
Oh you amaze me.

Cause you're simply everything to me,
I wonder if you ever think of me,
When I hear you calling,
It feels like I'm falling,

Cause you're simply everything I know,
I wonder if I ever made it show,
The sound of you're laughter,
You're the one I'm after,
Cause you're everything,

You're everything,
Yeah you're everything,
You're everything,
You're everything.

Lemme know what you think! Remember this was my first song!