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An Emotional Story Part-2

Posted Aug 1, '09 at 12:52pm

SonnyDude

SonnyDude

312 posts

General means it can happen with anyone but not always!!

 

Posted Aug 1, '09 at 12:58pm

SonnyDude

SonnyDude

312 posts

Ya!!

 

Posted Aug 1, '09 at 1:20pm

Moabarmorgamer

Moabarmorgamer

8,674 posts

Hey guys don't be too harsh on Sonny. After all, it's an...er...ok story, I guess. It just has a lot of errors and whatnot. But don't be mean just cuz the story isn't great. I mean, it's not like you guys are story gods, either. What gives you the right to criticize him?

 

Posted Aug 1, '09 at 8:06pm

VoteSocialist

VoteSocialist

994 posts

You all say that some of you don't have a car..
So let me tell you that it was also a story of a boy who wanted but didn't own a car..
It was a general story not an extraordinary one.


Yeah...who wouldn't want a car?
 

Posted Aug 1, '09 at 8:09pm

VoteSocialist

VoteSocialist

994 posts

Hey guys don't be too harsh on Sonny. After all, it's an...er...ok story, I guess. It just has a lot of errors and whatnot. But don't be mean just cuz the story isn't great. I mean, it's not like you guys are story gods, either. What gives you the right to criticize him?


But his story was awful and he needs to check his spelling and grammar!
 

Posted Aug 2, '09 at 12:58am

SonnyDude

SonnyDude

312 posts

To VoteSocialist-

Point any word in the story which was not spelt correst!!

Your Grammar is very weak....

 

Posted Aug 2, '09 at 2:05am

Moabarmorgamer

Moabarmorgamer

8,674 posts

Constructive Criticism
Well, Sonny, it's not so much your spelling as your choice of words.
And your grammar is very off. Your sentences are short and choppy.
And the story itself, while having a good morale, was not very good in my opinion.

 

Posted Aug 2, '09 at 4:23am

VoteSocialist

VoteSocialist

994 posts

He has a strong mind of ideas but he conveys them poorly.

 

Posted Aug 2, '09 at 5:11am

hardcore

hardcore

181 posts

it's a bit confusing but it seems ok

 

Posted Aug 2, '09 at 5:17am

SonnyDude

SonnyDude

312 posts

it's a bit confusing but it seems ok


My next story will be better than that!
 
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