Vote...I'm serious. Be nice to him. He's new, and the story's not that bad.

To VoteSocialist-

I don't think that there was a single grammar mistake but only the words were at mistake...

I am only telling the truth, one must be Machiavellian on these issues.

Ok, it is your opinon.

Vote...I'm serious. Be nice to him. He's new, and the story's not that bad.

-The story is about not having a car lol, but I know he will make a better one.

Where are all of the robot dinosaurs that shoot lazers when they roar?

I didn't like it. It was too modern and almost like you wanted to copy Slumdog Millionaire, it was also to short to have any meaning. Also it barely made any sense, commas too few, your paragraphs were confusing, and you had some run-on sentences. Really the story was too short.

you wanted to copy Slumdog Millionaire, it was also to short to have any meaning

I did wanted tp make it like that..

Really the story was too short.

I wanted to make it short.

Don't you think everybody needs to stop criticising Sonny's story in such a harsh way?
He's accepted that his writings need improvement; no one is perfect at something the first time they try.
He asked alot of people for tips on how to write a story, hes tried as best he can, and his next stories should improve greatly with constructive criticism. Give him a chance guys.

I'd like to see some of you trying to write a decent story before you critisise Sonny's. I'm mainly talking to VoteSocialist here. Vote, I know you've said you're joking, but some of the things you've said were uncalled for.

Just drop it, let him write his next one.

Perhaps a thread title change is in order, Sonny?

Don't you think everybody needs to stop criticising Sonny's story in such a harsh way?
He's accepted that his writings need improvement; no one is perfect at something the first time they try.
He asked alot of people for tips on how to write a story, hes tried as best he can, and his next stories should improve greatly with constructive criticism. Give him a chance guys.

Right, right, surrre. Like you don't ever criticize any stories/ TV/ movies you ever see. To be frank, in the world of story making expect to be critiqued