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Character Of a Person


Once there was a family of a boy, mother and father who lived in a town. They had a horse. They were very poor as they were the only people in the town who didn't own a car. They also had a garage which was in a deplorable state and their horse was an eyesore (Not good looking) Itâs hooves were spread wide apart which showed their poverty and the boy was ashamed of it.

The name of the boy was Jack. His mother was a very good person. She never let them feel that they were poor. She new the secrets of using brightly coloured curtains and painted in the right places. This gave the house a better look. She always told her family members that living on little inculcates moral values and if they had character, it was preferable to wealth.

His father was very generous and very honest. Though he got a moderate salary but he spent half of it for supporting his relatives.


Once there was a gala night of the country fair. There was very excitement as the winner of the Shining Buick(an expensive and a good car.) was going to be announced in the lottery. Time of waiting had ended and the winner was Jack's father.

The whole family was very excited and went to home but Jack decided to come late because he wanted to share his joy with his friends.

But when he returned home he saw that there was no sound of celebration and the house was dark. He was confused.

He rushed to his father to share his joy. But....He was shocked of his father's reaction. When he came to hug his father he pushed him away and snarled at him.

When he asked his mother that was the problem, she answered that his father had bought two tickets. One for his Boss and the other for himself. To distinguish between them he marked a small letter 'K' on ticket no. 348 on it's top right corner. The judges did not saw it and told the name of the buyer i.e. Jackâs father.

As his father was very honest, he was feeling depressed that should he give the car to his boss or keep it with himself as he had bought the tickets?

The boy was small and thought that it was an 'open and shut case'(a problem which can be solved easily). He thought that his father bought the tickets so the car belongs to his father not the boss.

His father was not practical about his family and had made the decision in his honesty. He ringed up the boss and told him the truth.

His boss was Jim Kendrick who was a millionaire but he was selfish and greedy. He owned a dozen cars. Instead of offering the car to Jack's father, he sent two chauffeurs to collect it and compensated for it by giving a box of cigars.

When the boy was small he didn't understood his father's decision but when he grew up he understood that by giving the car to the boss his father had proved that he had more character than his boss...

Thanx for reading
~~~SonnyDude~~~


If you were at the place of the boss, what would you have done?? Comments are welcome!!

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SonnyDude
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Ya!!

Moabarmorgamer
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Hey guys don't be too harsh on Sonny. After all, it's an...er...ok story, I guess. It just has a lot of errors and whatnot. But don't be mean just cuz the story isn't great. I mean, it's not like you guys are story gods, either. What gives you the right to criticize him?

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You all say that some of you don't have a car..
So let me tell you that it was also a story of a boy who wanted but didn't own a car..
It was a general story not an extraordinary one.


Yeah...who wouldn't want a car?
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Hey guys don't be too harsh on Sonny. After all, it's an...er...ok story, I guess. It just has a lot of errors and whatnot. But don't be mean just cuz the story isn't great. I mean, it's not like you guys are story gods, either. What gives you the right to criticize him?


But his story was awful and he needs to check his spelling and grammar!
SonnyDude
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To VoteSocialist-

Point any word in the story which was not spelt correst!!

Your Grammar is very weak....

Moabarmorgamer
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Constructive Criticism
Well, Sonny, it's not so much your spelling as your choice of words.
And your grammar is very off. Your sentences are short and choppy.
And the story itself, while having a good morale, was not very good in my opinion.

VoteSocialist
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He has a strong mind of ideas but he conveys them poorly.

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it's a bit confusing but it seems ok

SonnyDude
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it's a bit confusing but it seems ok


My next story will be better than that!
VoteSocialist
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An Emotional Story

By VoteSocialist:

Once upon a time, SunnyDude tried to write a story.

The End.

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I like it, and it portrays the kind of thing that happens alot in our society. And I think its a shame for somebody to try and make a huge political debacle over it *stares*. Anyways, kinda reminds me of the 'Ethics: Your Choice' thread over in World events... Whens the next one coming out.

And votesocialist, thats just cruel man, just cruel... >

SonnyDude
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And votesocialist, thats just cruel man, just cruel... >


Yes, he likes to tease others......

But he cannot tease me!!
VoteSocialist
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I'm sure he knows that I am just kidding.

SonnyDude
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What does

mean??
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[quote:GAGAMEN]Well who is going to read his stories anyway, it`s like saying you can`t judge and vote for politicians if you are not one, when people write books who is going to pay money and read it anyway, it`s called criticism.[/quote]

I meant you can criticize him, but you're just as bad! You don't write at all, therefore you are worse than he is. He may have a story with many errors, but you don't write at all. Everything awful you say to him goes straight back to you. It's just not fair. You see where I'm going with this?

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