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Character Of a Person


Once there was a family of a boy, mother and father who lived in a town. They had a horse. They were very poor as they were the only people in the town who didn't own a car. They also had a garage which was in a deplorable state and their horse was an eyesore (Not good looking) Itâs hooves were spread wide apart which showed their poverty and the boy was ashamed of it.

The name of the boy was Jack. His mother was a very good person. She never let them feel that they were poor. She new the secrets of using brightly coloured curtains and painted in the right places. This gave the house a better look. She always told her family members that living on little inculcates moral values and if they had character, it was preferable to wealth.

His father was very generous and very honest. Though he got a moderate salary but he spent half of it for supporting his relatives.


Once there was a gala night of the country fair. There was very excitement as the winner of the Shining Buick(an expensive and a good car.) was going to be announced in the lottery. Time of waiting had ended and the winner was Jack's father.

The whole family was very excited and went to home but Jack decided to come late because he wanted to share his joy with his friends.

But when he returned home he saw that there was no sound of celebration and the house was dark. He was confused.

He rushed to his father to share his joy. But....He was shocked of his father's reaction. When he came to hug his father he pushed him away and snarled at him.

When he asked his mother that was the problem, she answered that his father had bought two tickets. One for his Boss and the other for himself. To distinguish between them he marked a small letter 'K' on ticket no. 348 on it's top right corner. The judges did not saw it and told the name of the buyer i.e. Jackâs father.

As his father was very honest, he was feeling depressed that should he give the car to his boss or keep it with himself as he had bought the tickets?

The boy was small and thought that it was an 'open and shut case'(a problem which can be solved easily). He thought that his father bought the tickets so the car belongs to his father not the boss.

His father was not practical about his family and had made the decision in his honesty. He ringed up the boss and told him the truth.

His boss was Jim Kendrick who was a millionaire but he was selfish and greedy. He owned a dozen cars. Instead of offering the car to Jack's father, he sent two chauffeurs to collect it and compensated for it by giving a box of cigars.

When the boy was small he didn't understood his father's decision but when he grew up he understood that by giving the car to the boss his father had proved that he had more character than his boss...

Thanx for reading
~~~SonnyDude~~~


If you were at the place of the boss, what would you have done?? Comments are welcome!!

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The title will Repent For Something.

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See the next page.

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Repent for something

Once there was a boy from whom his whole family was irritated. He was very naughty and liked to listen bad words and abuses from others. He had a bad habit of stealing. His name was Jason.

He collected stamps from letter cards and sold them at a high rate. Once his father was given policy papers and money of another person. He kept it on the table in his room and went out.

As Jason saw it he tried to open it to see what is in it. When he opened it a huge amount of cash came out. He got very scared thinking that he could be sent to jail. He ran to USA.

But his father got in a problem. He was sent to jail for trying to steal money which he had not doneâ¦

His son got very hurt because his father was getting punished because of his faults.

He wanted to repent for this serious mistake. He went to be admitted in the U.S. Army.

Then after 2 years.... He became a general and had a good reputation in the army..

NOW was the time of his repenting. He went in a car to take his father from the jail.

His father came out thinking that what would have happened to his son.. He was seeing many prisoners going with their relatives.. He was feeling very alone.

Then a shining car came towards the jail. His father thought that how lucky that person would be whose son came to take him in a car and I am so unlucky.

When his son stepped out of the car he was surprised and his eyes were filled with tears. He became very happy and his son asked sorry from him and took him to his house RESPECTFULLY............

~SonnyDude~

Comments are Welcome!!

VoteSocialist
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I knew you had it in you SonnyDude! I always believed in you! This was a great story!!!

VoteSocialist
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Your wording is terrible still, for example:

He was very naughty and liked to listen bad words and abuses from others. He had a bad habit of stealing. His name was Jason
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SonnyDude
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Ugh.. Now what was terrible in this??

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They could not find Jason so they locked his father instead of him as his father was given the money with the policy papers><

VoteSocialist
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Your wording is terrible still


Ugh.. Now what was terrible in this??


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I will post my next story on 15th August..

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hmm... Very interesting story
It's not that emotional though >.>

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Ok..

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LOL you can`t become a general in the army in two years plus you have to get one of the best school educations for it.


I don't have much knowledge about army..
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Make a story about a Utopia where anything is possible!

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Very much improved, Sonny! But it's still kind of choppy wording(don't put the sentences like that. You're pushing enter too much). And you can't become a general in 2 years. Maybe he gets the Congressional Medal of Honor, instead? That's the highest award America bestows, and it can be gotten by someone on any rank; they have to do something really amazing that saves many lives. Maybe that will help?
And yeah, not really emotional. It's kind of short and just sort of says how he is....

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Make a story about a Utopia where anything is possible!


What is UTOPIA??
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