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Hi. This is Moat. And this is where I would like to see people post some morbid poems, stories, etc. Although they don't have to, and I will be mainly the one posting here. First entry to my Morbid Literature Journal:

A very much more selfless, brighter, and, dare I say, more optimistic and therefore idiotic, view.

The Only Thing I Ask

I am on the test, the trial
For my life, the danger is dire
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Is to keep others from the same fate
Protect them from this amount of hate
Save the others
Please God the only thing I ask of You
Save my friends and my mother
From this horror
My photographs, my memories
Will have to help me through
I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missin them again
The hatred of others burns like fire
Why do they hate me?
I'm just a man
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Protect my family and friends
And my strength, it will hold
Through the dark and through the cold
I'm hurting and I'm hated
They hurt me with word and rod
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
The others around me have lost hope
But I pray to You
And I remember the good times
You have given me
With my family and friends
And I can pull through
Because hurt is nothing new
In this world
And all I need to do
Is pray again to You
I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missin them again
The hatred of others burns like fire
Why do they hate me?
I'm just a man
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Protect my family and friends
And my strength, it will hold
Through the dark and through the cold
I am weak outside
They have hurt my body and my mind
For no reason other than I'm different
I believe that the other prisoners went
Well, I am still alive
As long as I can, time after time
Think about those I love
Those left so far behind
But I can't help but wish
That I could be there again
Back where I love to be
There's nothing here for me
On this road of life
But I trust You, dear God
And I pray to You, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Save them this day
I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missin them again
The hatred of others burns like fire
Why do they hate me?
I'm just a man
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Protect my family and friends
And my strength, it will hold
Through the dark and through the cold
There's no one here
Noplace to go
My overwhelming fear
Oh, no no no
But it's not for me
It's for them
I will believe they're safe
Until the end
And there may be horror
There may be strife
But if I lose them
It'll be like a knife
And to you I pray
Dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Protect them on this darkest day
When I'm not around
When I'm much too far away
I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missin them again
The hatred of others burns like fire
Why do they hate me?
I'm just a man
But, dear God
The only thing I ask of You
Protect my family and friends
And my strength, it will hold
Through the dark and through the cold
Dear God
You can take me
Save them, protect them
The only thing I ask
Save the others from this fate
Protect them all, upon this day

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Moabarmorgamer
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Okayz!
P.S.- Not to be a Nazi, but you spelled "desert" wrong in your poem. Otherwise I love it!

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Not to be a Nazi, but you spelled "desert" wrong in your poem.


I always do >>.<< My homophone spelling FAILS. IT'S OVER 9000!!!

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A much darker revision of my submission to the Poetry Contest for the Affection theme.

Perfect Poison

Do you know?
What's the point?
Of lovers to stay together
Like two bones to the same joint?
I don't really know
And I refuse to let it go
I can't understand
I've traveled all through the land
For the answer
Even when you are in love
It's unstoppable
Impossible to grasp
But while this world is cruel...
It's wonders can make you gasp
It's the perfect poison
Love, impossible to get rid of
It's gonna kill me some day
That, I know
Yet, though I have a will to live
I can't let go of love to do so
You don't wanna let it go
And yet, you know you must
It'll destroy your world one day
Leave behind nothing but ashes and dust
But, what it brings while it's still there!
I guess it's worth dying for
There is no antidote
To this terrific poison
That I don't want to get rid of
It's so confusing
Do I want to live or die?
What's happened to my life?
If keeping love means I will die
I just can't understand why
I'm willing to lay down and die
All for love
Some say it lasts forever
But it's just a perfect poison
I should've known
It was too good to be true
But that won't be the end of me and you
It's the perfect poison
Love, impossible to get rid of
It's gonna kill me some day
That, I know
Yet, though I have a will to live
I can't let go of love to do so
You don't wanna let it go
And yet, you know you must
It'll destroy your world one day
Leave behind nothing but ashes and dust
But, what it brings while it's still there!
I guess it's worth dying for
The perfect poison
Just for me
I guess my love
Will never let me free
Well, it was good while it lasted
Poison's wasting me away
And yet, still any old day
I would die for this perfect poison
Love
It's not a waste
It's the perfect poison
Love, impossible to get rid of
It's gonna kill me some day
That, I know
Yet, though I have a will to live
I can't let go of love to do so
You don't wanna let it go
And yet, you know you must
It'll destroy your world one day
Leave behind nothing but ashes and dust
But, what it brings while it's still there!
I guess it's worth dying for
Your poison runs through my veins
My blood drips, and it stains
Can'tcha feel the poison rising?
I can feel
Our love destroy me
Straight to the heart
Not yet the end of love
Never again will I let go, my friend
I can't regret
Decisions made for me by my heart
The one thing that never dies
Is the thing that kills

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Really short...pointless? I may post additions to this one later. Who knows?



Tick tock
Not much time still left on the clock
Going around and round
And I'm just falling down and down
To land so hard
And my hand has no more cards
I am done
But I won't give it up
Even though death is coming
I won't run

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I got another one inspired by Metallicas' song called One, which I just happen to be listening to. Also a continuation of one by other poems.

Gone And Died

A soldier far from death,
But dead inside.
Killed in battle,
Yet still living.

How can this be?
How can he die?
How can he live?
How can he be both?

The bomb struck him down,
Yet he still lives.
Only inside though,
But his body is dead.

No arms,
Legs,
Brain,
Or conscience.

Once his life is gone,
One will not know.
He is but a casualty,
In a war of death.

His friend is dead,
Struck down before his eyes,
But that had no effect,
As he is dead himself.

He cannot think,
Breathe,
Speak,
Or move.

Life itself is out of death,
Never incite it's precious vows,
As they all go away,
Only to return in lethal form.

He cannot hear,
Taste,
See,
Or be.

Life itself is out death,
Never incite it's precious vows,
As they all go away,
Only to return in lethal form.

The battle was fierce,
It's combatants loyal.
It's a final death,
A final death of morality.

He cannot eat,
Sleep,
Live,
Or die.

It's all over,
But then it's not.
Life can never end,
Not when there is no life.

Life itself is out of death,
Never incite it's precious vows,
As they all go away,
Only to return in lethal form.

Read it as a song. It's intended to last about nine minutes, but that's to long to read. It's okay if it's off I think, it's the first song I've ever written.

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Moat, do you by any chance like Avenged Sevenfold?
Because I can't help noticing, after reading your poems on pages 1 and 2, that you've used a lot of lyrics from their songs in "your" work.
For example, your first poem had lyrics from Dear God.
The poem at the top of page 2 had lyrics from Brompton Cocktail.
Another poem on page 2 had lyrics from Scream.

I mean... That's not your own work, is it?
Sorry if you've already addressed this situation; I only read the first 2 pages.

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Hm, it could be possible? It could also be based off of them. Gotta give the benefit of a doubt here.

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Finally I think I got my butt in gear!

What We Deserved?

I remembered black skies, gunfire all around me
I remembered each shot as blood began to flow
Like a startling sign that fate had finally found me
And pain was all I learned
Did I get what I deserve?
So give me me a reason
Why I should die
Fighting for those who treasoned
That I should fall
And the evil still stand tall
There was nothing in sight darkness tinged by blood
There was nowhere to hide
All through the bloody mud
And as I fell, I watched my comrades screaming
Did we get what we deserved?
Or are we simply dreaming?
So give me a reason
Why I should die
And they should still stand tall
And I hear the screams that echo, as we began to fall
In every loss of good
There was an evil that we fell for
In every soldier losing blood
There was an evil causing the rift before
And the screams were all we heard
This world is upside down, it's all wrong
And we would never last for long
But let it be enough to reach the truth that lies
Beyond our souls and as we die

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One Last Breath

As I stand there, I think about all my past memories. All those good times with my family. The state fair. The Vacation to Hawaii. And the birth of my little girl Emma. But know it all ends here for me, at this concentration camp. The Nazi's, those inhuman beasts, Need to all die. Go to hell is what I told them, but they didn't care. I stand here in a line with all my other Division 23 Friends. POW's we all were. Now, they started to count down, my whole life flashes before my eyes. 5-4-3-2-1-0 POW!!! The bullets fired. I took my last breath as time stared to slow down. I saw the bullet headed right for me. It ripped right through m chest, striaght throught the heart. I lay there now, on the ground, in a pool of my own, and friends blood. My last breath, was now released. A world of black was all I then saw.

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Let me see...
Dear God by Avenged Sevenfold

A lonely road, crossed another cold state line
Miles away from those I love purpose hard to find
While I recall all the words you spoke to me
Can't help but wish that I was there
Back where I'd love to be, oh yeah

Dear God the only thing I ask of you is
To hold her when I'm not around
When I'm much too far away
We all need that person who can be true to you
But I left her when I found her
And now I wish I'd stayed
Cause I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missing you again oh no
Once again

There's nothing here for me on this barren road
There's no one here while the city sleeps
And all the shops are closed
Can't help but think of the times I've had with you
Pictures and some memories will have to help me through, oh yeah

Dear God the only thing I ask of you is
To hold her when I'm not around
When I'm much too far away
We all need that person who can be true to you
I left her when I found her
And now I wish I'd stayed
Cause I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missing you again oh no
Once again

Some search, never finding a way
Before long, they waste away
I found you, something told me to stay
I gave in, to selfish ways
And how I miss someone to hold
When hope begins to fade

A lonely road, crossed another cold state line
Miles away from those I love purpose hard to find

Dear God the only thing I ask of you is
To hold her when I'm not around
When I'm much too far away
We all need the person who can be true to you
I left her when I found her
And now I wish I'd stayed
Cause I'm lonely and I'm tired
I'm missing you again oh no
Once again

Ok, so that was one of the songs you said I copied, yeah?

Scream by Avenged Sevenfold

Caught up in this madness too blind to see
Woke animal feelings in me
Took over my sense and I lost control
I'll taste your blood tonight

You know I make you wanna scream
You know I make you wanna run from me baby
but know it's too late you've wasted all your time

Relax while you're closing your eyes to me
So warm as I'm setting you free
With your arms by your side there's no struggling
Pleasure's all mine this time

You know I make you wanna scream
You know I make you wanna run from me baby
but know it's too late you've wasted all your time

Cherishing, those feelings pleasuring
Cover me, unwanted clemency
Scream till there's silence
Scream while there's life left, vanishing
Scream from the pleasure unmask your desire perishing

We've all had a time where we've lost control
We've all had our time to grow
I'm hoping I'm wrong but I know I'm right
I'll hunt again one night

You know I make you wanna scream
You know I make you wanna run from me baby
but know it's too late you've wasted all your time

Cherishing, those feelings pleasuring
Cover me, unwanted clemency
Scream till there's silence
Scream while there's life left, vanishing
Scream from the pleasure unmask your desire perishing

Some live repressing their instinctive feelings
Protest the way we're built don't point the blame on me

Scream, scream, scream the way you would if I ravaged your body
Scream, scream, scream the way you would if I ravaged your mind

Cherishing, those feelings pleasuring
Cover me, unwanted clemency
Scream till there's silence
Scream while there's life left, vanishing
Scream from the pleasurem unmask your desire
Perishi

There's another one.


Brompton Cocktail by Avenged Sevenfold

(Out of time...)
Doc, I'm dying, I'm feeling compromised (feeling compromised)
And so dehumanized (and so dehumanized)
I lost my final fight to disease, I feel that this is where it ends
I need that shot to enter my vein
My Brompton Cocktail blend

'Cause I can't feel my face
I won't struggle on
In a world so cold
In a world so wrong

I'm not running away, been fighting this so long (so long)
Such a price that we pay, we gotta be so strong
In a lie...

I'm tired, induced euphoria (induced euphoria)
To help me move along (help me move along)
I wanna meet my maker in peace, I want to feel alive again
So put that smile back on my face and mix it strong my Friend

'Cause I can't feel my face
I won't struggle on
In a world so cold
In a world so wrong

I'm not running away, been fighting this so long (so long)
Such a price that we pay, we gotta be so strong
And I take my life tonight 'cause I have the right to die How I wanna
And leave how I arrived, so alive

I believe my sins have been forgiven
And I believe my choice will save me from this life
Please don't question why
My sins have been forgotten
I believe I'll find peace in afterlife
Please don't question why
I left this way

'Cause I can't feel my face
I won't struggle on
In a world so cold
In a world so wrong

I'm not running away, been fighting this so long (so long)
Such a price that we pay, we gotta be so strong
And I take my life tonight 'cause I have the right to die How I wanna
And leave how I arrived, so alive
(Alive)

Ok, could you point out which songs are similar? I'd like to sort this out. Cuz there is a possibility that they might actually have lyrics in common; I used to listen to A7X when writing songs. =(. I hate it when I do that...and these lyrics were from a long time ago, so I wouldn't remember and I didn't bother to read the author's note when I c/ped this from my account on Quizilla. You might be right.

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Okay, I'm on my phone, so I can't go back and quote it all, sorry.

But the first poem you posted on this thread had a lot of lyrics from Dear God in it.
Like... "dear god, the only thing I ask of you is..." and "I'm lonely and I'm tired, I'm missing you again..."

And in Brompton Cocktail you used the lyrics in the top of page 2 poem. "doc" and "Brompton cocktail" (and more, but I can't remember what)
You used aspects of Scream in another poem on page 2.

Sorry for pointing that out, I just felt that, although its mostly your own work, its still partly copied.

also I can't refresh tthe page before posting, sorry if you've already posted. Darn phone...

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Oh. Well, it's ok...
And if any lyrics were copied, sorry about that.
Could we run this thing again, please? Except we need it to be like all dark and disgusting and whatnot. So it will fit the morbid theme =).

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Did anyone read my last one? Seems live not VV.VV

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Only inside though,
But his body is dead.


Not bad TSL, not bad at all. But you're making it look all big and intimidating by pressing enter so much...
And my advice: needs more rhyme so it can flow.
Still a great poem.
It won't be after it's stuck in my head all day, though ;(
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Sorry again, Moat. Glad you didn't make a fuss about it

I've got a poem I might post next week... (when I get back from my nans)

Although, Nicho might be upset about it. I'm not surprised he posted here too :P Poor guy

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