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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Sep 22, '12 at 2:17pm

kevin8ye

kevin8ye

514 posts

Without warning, love
Left me, it seems, while I slept.
Tears, like raindrops, fall.

U have a mistake on middle line.

Left (1) me (1) it (1) seems (1) while (2) i (1) slept(1)

 

Posted Sep 22, '12 at 3:14pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

4,977 posts

while (2)

HowManySyllables, Mirriam Webster, and Dictionary say it's 1. I'll consider it like the word fire, it counts in favor of the participant.

 

Posted Sep 22, '12 at 7:40pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,276 posts

meh

Man..that wasn't even close to the required syllables =p

 

Posted Sep 23, '12 at 8:15am

Max000_Extreme

Max000_Extreme

110 posts

Frog is not a frog
Because if a frog is a frog
Flies will roam no more

 

Posted Sep 24, '12 at 12:43am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,276 posts

Frog is not a frog
Because if a frog is a frog
Flies will roam no more

2nd line had 8 syllables. first off. Second off...what does this have to do with Silence?

 

Posted Sep 24, '12 at 9:38pm

jeol

jeol

3,565 posts

Spinning midst the void,
He spread his mouth to speak, yet
No air did escape.

 

Posted Sep 25, '12 at 9:05pm

Darktroop07

Darktroop07

668 posts

2nd line had 8 syllables. first off. Second off...what does this have to do with Silence?

The fly is making noise and by the frog eating it the noise is killed off.

 

Posted Sep 25, '12 at 10:29pm

Skeleton_Pilot

Skeleton_Pilot

1,290 posts

Where did the sound go?
This is just ridiculous...
I can't hear nothin'!

 

Posted Sep 25, '12 at 10:34pm

killersup10

killersup10

1,786 posts

suicide quite
blissfullness covers everyone
eternal silence

Is this a proper haiku?

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 12:10am

Ernie15

Ernie15

12,548 posts

Knight

Is this a proper haiku?

No, a haiku follows a 5-7-5 syllable scheme. Yours is 4-8-5.