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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Sep 26, '12 at 5:03am

goumas13

goumas13

4,485 posts

Pause. Listen softly
Silence surrounds you, quiet
Finally some peace

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 7:08am

killersup10

killersup10

1,781 posts

suicide peacefull
blissfullness covers all
eternal silence

Now is this one 5-7-5?

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 7:15am

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

blissfullness covers all

6 syllables.

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 8:38am

killersup10

killersup10

1,781 posts

suicide peacefull
blissfullness shrouds evil minds
eternal silence

better?

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 9:13am

nichodemus

nichodemus

11,628 posts

Knight

Yes.

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 9:35am

Max000_Extreme

Max000_Extreme

110 posts

End of Universe
End of all the life and birth
End of all noise

 

Posted Sep 26, '12 at 10:07am

nichodemus

nichodemus

11,628 posts

Knight

Last line has only 4 syllables.

 

Posted Sep 27, '12 at 2:20am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,020 posts

The fly is making noise and by the frog eating it the noise is killed off.

It never stated in the haiku that the fly was making noise...the main point of the haiku also was about how the frog wasn't a frog, BUT if it was a frog then the fly would be gone. Nothing about noise

 

Posted Sep 27, '12 at 6:00am

nichodemus

nichodemus

11,628 posts

Knight

It's not up to your final discretion whether it is accepted or not.

 

Posted Sep 27, '12 at 7:24am

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

The fact that noise isn't mentioned. Its also not about clowns, chickens, or cannabilism. So whats your point? As Nicho said, it's the judges duty to determine what the poem is about, and then if it should be considered or discarded.