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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Oct 29, '12 at 8:39pm

shock457

shock457

470 posts

I requested Murasaki9 months ago. -.-

So how is your judging going by far? Good-ish or almost fin-ish?

 

Posted Oct 29, '12 at 11:20pm

skydragon720

skydragon720

274 posts

With my luck, he will be done judging in 15 minutes.

 

Posted Oct 29, '12 at 11:26pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

5,011 posts

A lot of the entries were too similar to really stand out, so here's the top 5 in no particular order.

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kevin8ye

Darkness fills the world
Invaders raid the city
All that's left is death

This does a good job of describing abstract desolation. When a nation rises against another, no good comes from it. My only complaint is the last line. It's a bit awkward. Something truly finite like "Only death remains" would have been better.

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IC4I

Rise up my brother!
Our time to fall is not now.
It is yet to come.

A great depiction of comradery. It reminds me of WWII when the Russians had to ration ammo to one soldier and guns to another. It acknowledges the inevitable without being dismal.

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shock457

My heart is in vain,
I shall rise from the ashes,
With a pure of heart

This reminds me of Batman: taking a bad situation as a reason to better yourself and create change.

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rayoflight3

*****s be oppressed.
Finna cap an ofay's ***.
We ain't playin', son.

Although I'm not really a fan of the language, this reminded me of the riots in England last year and accurately expressed the views of the average punk.

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ProfessorOak

Hold your sadness in
Another day gone to waste
It becomes too much

This really portrays the bottled-up emotion that precedes unrest in any situation.

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And the winner is...

IC4I

Your haiku reminded me of Vorkuta, the Battle of Thermopylae, and many other events against oppression. Good job!
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IC4I's poem will be proudly displayed in the about of the account HaikuContestWinners, at least until an official archive is made.

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murasaki gets to pick/judge the next theme. Have fun everyone!

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 12:03am

shock457

shock457

470 posts

Batman huh? No one ever said that to me.

I thought winners pick theme, or that ruling created by acmed is canceled out?

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 12:06am

shock457

shock457

470 posts

Sorry for DP.

Now I know why.

I feel as if I'm used to the ideal AG world I was in a couple of months ago... Now acmed, Google, and Jeffery has long been gone. :(

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 7:37am

xerox

xerox

316 posts

Hmm strange, All the Haiku I've seen in Japan, is about going around the meaning, and at the same time reaching to the heart of the problem. They usually have strange meaning and the lines are not connected with each other, but at the same time they are in a simple way. Any haiku that has a meaning and you can understand it  because its written too obvious, i just cant accept it as a haiku. I've learned that for good haiku, the last phrase is most important. It grabs the whole meaning, and underlines the first two lines of the haiku.

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 7:54am

xerox

xerox

316 posts

Btw my haiku reminds is about the French Revolution..About the poor who walk on the streets, and they uprise from the darkness, to stand against the rich They want to reach the sky, but are oppressed and in pain, by the royals. So anyway, the poor are sick of paying so much money so the rich to live heaven... But now that i think of it my haiku has a repeating element on the second line, that removes the meaning of the third.. I should have noticed that earlier...

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 11:00am

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

murasaki9 has volunteered to be a co-judge, so maybe next time guys.

Thank you.

I requested Murasaki9 months ago. -.-

I appreciate the thought, Shock. I never knew about that. I've been away for too long. :D

Okay people!! New Theme!
Fear Mongering

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 11:00am

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Oh, and good luck.

 

Posted Oct 30, '12 at 11:06am

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Ignore the fact that I Double posted and that I'm now committing the terrible act of Triple posting.
I forgot to give the deadline. Two weeks to get everything in. Contests ends November 12th, 2012.