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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Aug 30, '09 at 9:51am

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

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Mine is like that!

*facepalm* SYLLABLES! I was doing words!

gleaming from the sun
silence and hope come over
yes, you have found peace


HAPPY BUDDY?

 

Posted Aug 30, '09 at 9:57am

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

Syllabuls are right, but the reference to the pond is subliminal.

But I have one of these, so It makes sense.

*taps forehead*

Why do I hear an Echo?

Tap, Tap, Tap...

 

Posted Aug 30, '09 at 9:58am

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

3,038 posts

I just can't win. I hold this one out, until round two comes. I know I will lose.

 

Posted Aug 30, '09 at 5:39pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

I lean over the pond.
Just look at the colors.
Oh so beauti- *splash*


Fluffy, the middle line doesnt meet the required 7 sylabuls
 

Posted Sep 1, '09 at 5:33pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

Judging tomorrow! Last day for entrys.

 

Posted Sep 1, '09 at 8:37pm

Ernie15

Ernie15

13,302 posts

Knight

Fluffy, the middle line doesnt meet the required 7 sylabuls


And the first line has 6 syllables, so I suggest you fix the whole thing.
 

Posted Sep 1, '09 at 10:53pm

shayneii

shayneii

2,688 posts

@maverick4: You contacted heard from any other mods about the merit thing? lol

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 3:28pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

@ shayneii: No, but Zoph said she would look into it I think.

No More Entrys. Judging Now.

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 3:48pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

Bronze Award: Moabarmorgamer (Moat)

The water ripples
The stone skips across the pond
The frogs leap away


This one is written really quite well, and It reminds me alot of a pond. Though in my opinion, it would have been best it you had tied the lines together. Instead of each line being about a differnt thing, try and make them have something a bit more in common. Okay, I could have worded that better.

*hides*

Iron Award: Poison Arrow

Silent reflections
Distorting, shifting, changing
Scratching the surface


This is really good also. Though it reminds me of a grey, cloudy misty sorta of day, where you sit and watch something for hours, it still talks of a pond. Good job to you too also.

Silver Award: shayneii

Splish, a fish jumps... joy
Bursting, colourful delight
The sound goes, "Gah-ploonk".


This one is alot like some classic haikus from feudal Japan, if you ever bother to look at them. It really reminds me of a pond. Exelente

Gold Award (and also first place): Alt

Ripples Ricochet
round stone changing destinies
An era of thoughts

I have to say, it was reall close between you and shayneii. You both had great haikus; shayneii's resembling a more classic haiku, while yours reflected deeper into the thoughts. So yours won. I would go say get your merit, but, I cant. Oh well, atleast you have a warm fuzzy feeling in you, right?
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And now for those that the above awards cant describe:

1337 Award: GuitarHeroFTW

i liek pondz they iz
very coulourful and they
are made of water


7331!!!!!1!!

Scare-the-something-out-of-me Award: Bronze

The water is still
But I know you sleep under
Ever watching me

Jamie? Theres something in the water...

*gets pulled under*

Something straight out of a horror movie m8...

The 'I could care less' Award: Zega

The pond is a pond.
No ordinary old pond.
It is just a pond

If you dont want to be here, why dont you just leave? Whats so special about the pond that you feel a need to write about it? Hmmm?

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 3:50pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

Hmmmm... Oh yes, the next deadline is Wednsday, Septemer 9th, and the theme will be The Fruit Tree. (orchard, or a lone tree, have at it)