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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Nov 15, '12 at 4:46pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,327 posts

And lol --change is on the breeze... *hoping*

Keep hoping because it's coming. Change is, not the breeze though. I don't want to be too cold while I work on improvements.

I apologize to all you AG Vets who have come on here complaining about my sorry judging practices. Things have changed. I promise it will be better, at least while I'm around.

 

Posted Nov 15, '12 at 9:30pm

Ernie15

Ernie15

11,225 posts

What is it we need?
Matters not, for what we have
Is what we live by.

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 12:49am

xXxDAPRO89xXx

xXxDAPRO89xXx

1,647 posts

Keep hoping because it's coming. Change is, not the breeze though. I don't want to be too cold while I work on improvements.

I have a feeling its coming also. But i would want that breeze in the summer =P

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 3:39pm

rayoflight3

rayoflight3

382 posts

I feel as though the due date should be closer to the 22nd given the theme.

Here's mine:

Oh my God! Thank God
that I have God to thank for
this Thanksgiving Day.

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 3:49pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

2,467 posts

I survived disease
Hardship, war, every pain
To get one turkey

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 4:05pm

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

789 posts

This Thanksgiving Day
our spirits are together
as our hearth is warmed.

Not sure if the last line is correct syllable wise.
How much syllables are in 'warmed?'
If it is wrong, I'll change it.

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 4:15pm

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

789 posts

Hardship, war, every pain

This is 6 syllables, no?

"Hard-ship, war, ev-ree pain"

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 4:18pm

The_Gentlemen

The_Gentlemen

45 posts

I survived disease
Hardship, war, every pain
To get one turkey

Congratulations. You made me laugh.

I'd suggest to add punctuation.

I survived disease.
Hardship, war, every pain.
To get one turkey...

Not sure if the last line is correct syllable wise.
How much syllables are in 'warmed?'
If it is wrong, I'll change it.

Warmed? One syllabe. It's fine.

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 4:21pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,327 posts

I have a feeling its coming also. But i would want that breeze in the summer =P

I feel as though the due date should be closer to the 22nd given the theme.

You guys 'feel' a lot. :D A breeze for summer would be wonderful. And yes, perhaps you are right about the date @raoflight. But, people complained about the last round being too short, so that's what happened.

 

Posted Nov 16, '12 at 4:23pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

2,467 posts

This is 6 syllables, no?

"Hard-ship, war, ev-ree pain"

Darn, I guess it is. I was thinking, "ev-er-ee."

I survived disease,
Hardship, war, every last pain,
To get one turkey...