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Posted Dec 7, '12 at 3:09am

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

900 posts

You don't have to "not" use it, I just thought you should know it isn't a requirement.

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 7:00am

killersup10

killersup10

2,766 posts

blistering tundra
beautiful swollensnow flakes
frozen paradise

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 5:23pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

Stoic

I can't be bothered
To even attempt to feel.
Apathy at last!

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 5:31pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,396 posts

The deliciousness of redundancy isn't lost on me.
In fact, it was quite hilarious. Mav has broken the spell
so there's nothing to laugh about now.

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 5:43pm

killersup10

killersup10

2,766 posts

blistering tundra
beautiful swollen snow flakes
frozen paradise

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 6:00pm

xerox

xerox

512 posts

Wtf.. Im not saying "Winter,finnaly, is here!" Im trying to show everyone that the winter finnaly after long waiting is here and i try to discribe it with Paradice of Ice
"Winter finnaly is here:
Paradice of Ice"
See? I dont need to put comas after and before finnaly, because if I do it, it wont make any sense......

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 6:06pm

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

900 posts

What about:

"Finally, winter is here;
Paradise of Ice."

 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 7:38pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

9,436 posts

swollensnow flakes

You might want to change that to "swollen snowflakes".
See? I dont need to put comas after and before finnaly, because if I do it, it wont make any sense

That doesn't make it any less gramatically incorrect. In this case, "finally" is a nonessential clause and should be seperated by commas. Alternately, you could say, "Winter is finally here" or, "Finally, winter is here".
 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 8:09pm

rayoflight3

rayoflight3

440 posts

That doesn't make it any less gramatically incorrect. In this case, "finally" is a nonessential clause and should be seperated by commas. Alternately, you could say, "Winter is finally here" or, "Finally, winter is here".


"Finally" is not a clause. It contains neither a subject nor a predicate. It only functions to modify "here," so there shouldn't be commas around it. I agree though that the wording is awkward and would flow better if switched around.
 

Posted Dec 7, '12 at 8:37pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

9,436 posts

"Finally" is not a clause.

I apologize; It's a parenthetic expression.