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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Dec 17, '12 at 1:43pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

4,978 posts

but only one submission per user..so oh well haha

You can always submit a different one if you're having doubts, just say which one is your final entry.

 

Posted Dec 17, '12 at 7:21pm

marton96

marton96

401 posts

What a holiday

Though I am not nice
Cheer and spice and happy things
Always make me smile

~marton96

It's about being naughty but enjoying holiday spirit.

 

Posted Dec 17, '12 at 11:12pm

nichodemus

nichodemus

12,077 posts

Knight

She teases in red,
Giggles with faux innocence,
Tugging at my tie.

 

Posted Dec 18, '12 at 3:54am

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,621 posts

Well nich O.o

You sly dirty dog you haha

 

Posted Dec 18, '12 at 7:44am

nichodemus

nichodemus

12,077 posts

Knight

I wonder if it can get past the PG filter here.

 

Posted Dec 18, '12 at 11:14am

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

801 posts

Eh, I don't see why that wouldn't get passed the PG filter - because, if you understood in 'that' way it's not furthermore corrupting your mind.

 

Posted Dec 18, '12 at 11:18am

nichodemus

nichodemus

12,077 posts

Knight

It is pretty obvious that there was romantic content in it.

 

Posted Dec 18, '12 at 11:20am

GhostOfHorror

GhostOfHorror

801 posts

But if there are underage users reading it they mightn't understand it.

 

Posted Dec 19, '12 at 11:29am

MagicTree

MagicTree

360 posts

Naughty or Nice?
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Or rather, nice?

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Thanks for the critiques, Palp.
In case you doubt the word fire
In case you doubt the word chilled

 

Posted Dec 19, '12 at 12:26pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

4,978 posts

In case you doubt the word fire

Fire automatically conforms to whatever amount (1-2) fits for the participant. But your last line is 6 syllables.
Naugh(1)ty(2)? Or(3) ra(4)ther(5), nice(6)?