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Posted Dec 19, '12 at 12:26pm
EmperorPalpatine
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In case you doubt the word fire
Fire automatically conforms to whatever amount (1-2) fits for the participant. But your last line is 6 syllables.
Naugh(1)ty(2)? Or(3) ra(4)ther(5), nice(6)?
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Posted Dec 19, '12 at 12:28pm
nichodemus
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Unintentionally, I realise my Haiku looks like male genitalia.
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Posted Dec 19, '12 at 1:41pm
MagicTree
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Oh, I fail once more.
Naughty or Nice?
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Or what about nice?
New version! Thanks Palp!
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Posted Dec 19, '12 at 1:43pm
EmperorPalpatine
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Posted Dec 19, '12 at 1:54pm
MagicTree
243 posts
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Sorry. I'm being zoned out.
Naughty or Nice?
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Rather, nice?
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Posted Dec 20, '12 at 6:20am
xerox
298 posts
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Naughty or just Nice?
There are presents for you all
Santa do not cares.
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Posted Dec 20, '12 at 6:34am
Lee_Blade
86 posts
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Here is my try:
A pond is always a pond
Nobody can change a pond
Even if the pond has expand
A pond is forever a pond
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Posted Dec 20, '12 at 6:38am
nichodemus
10,532 posts
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Needs to be 3 lines, not 4.
First line has 5 syllables, not the 7 yours has.
Third line has 5, not the 8 yours has.
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Posted Dec 20, '12 at 6:41am
Lee_Blade
86 posts
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Again my second try:
Naughty or Nice?
Naughty or Nice rather be ice
Naughty or Nice are all with Christ
Naught or rather be nice
On Christmas Ice Christ will rise
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Posted Dec 20, '12 at 6:43am
nichodemus
10,532 posts
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3 not 4 lines.
First line has more than 8 syllables.
Second has more than 7 syllables.
Third has more than 5 syllables,
A Haiku is a three line poem with a 5-7-5 format.
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