Hopefully, copying from Notepad will work...
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pangtongshu
Blood dries on his knife
We curse, despite our hunger
As he hands us bread
Ah, the kind executioner. A tasteful twist on the theme. I like the overall imagery. It's difficult to paint a picture in so few words, but you did.
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marton96
Though I am not nice
Cheer and spice and happy things
Always make me smile
The alliteration was good (Make Me sMile). I like the uplifting simplicity of this one. There are plenty of 2 syllable words that could've filled the space for 'not nice', but 'not nice' seems to be the most fitting.
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nichodemus
She teases in red,
Giggles with faux innocence,
Tugging at my tie.
Woah now. Well, my internet security was blocking the thread for porn due to 'naughty' in the title anyway, so whatever.
This has a great flow due to the alliteration (shE tEases; fAUX innOcence).
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MagicTree
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Rather, nice?
The sharp contrast really illustrates the theme. It depicts the Yin-Yang balance of our choices. Very nice.
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xerox
Naughty or just Nice?
There are presents for you all
Santa do not cares.
*does not care
Other than that, it reminds us that this is a time of generosity for everyone to enjoy. And that reminds me of this.
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killersup10 (CAN'T WIN THIS ROUND!)
A bloody soaked shirt
Small armies terrorize them
The fat man in charge
Who is "them"? "Bloody soaked" doesn't make sense. "Blood soaked" is the usual expression, but the syllable count would be off.
Anyway, I see that you went for the Naughty side. This reminds me of Stalin and his Secret Police. Very naughty, indeed.
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xXxDAPRO89xXx
You naughty or nice?
Better make up your mind soon!
Or coal you shall get!
I don't know how one could recite this without using an east-coast mobster accent. It would've been far better if the adverse consequence was abstractly implied instead of directly stated.
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Maverick4
Friend, what have you done?
Innocent blood you have spilled,
To placate the crowd.
I can't help but be reminded of Mark 15.
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Arceus12
Good, good or bad, bad,
If you're good nobody cares,
But cops will get you.
This feels incomplete, as though it needs another line to convey the meaning of the last line. I understand that you meant "but if you commit a crime, cops will get you", but it's much better if the full message is in the poem itself. Condensing a full idea to 17 words or less is a challenge. Rise to it.
Anyway, I like that it shows the one-sidedness of society doing too little to exemplify good behavior, and instead focusing on the negative. A good idea, but unfinished.
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Lee_Blade
Be good,Christ loves you
Be bad,devils will get you
Good or bad?choose one
A very blunt, black-and-white interpretation. I would've preferred a Paradise Lost twist instead.
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Maverick4
This was the sort of interpretation I was hoping for: Something that, to some, was considered good, but to others, bad; it exemplified a pitfall of the Principle of Utility with elegance. Well done.
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Maverick4's poem will be proudly displayed in the about of the account HaikuContestWinners, at least until an official archive is made.
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The next theme, as chosen by murasaki9, is: Restoration. She will be judging and will give the due date soon. Have fun, everyone!
