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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Dec 30, '12 at 6:38pm

Freakenstein

Freakenstein

6,927 posts

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Honey dewdrops morn
gives Green respite 'fore the day
To sparkle with life

 

Posted Dec 31, '12 at 8:15pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,355 posts

I can't help but be reminded of Mark 15

Bingo.

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 9:50pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

Heal me from thy wounds
Restore me from the darkness
God,guide me to light

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 10:28pm

ArgamenPhish

ArgamenPhish

657 posts

Pained and broken down
Lost in despair, looking up
Bestowed strength to me

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:17pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

I hope I win this round because last round I did not win.

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:33pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

4,482 posts

Heal me from thy wounds

You know what thy means..correct?

Your sentence means: Heal me from your wounds

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:42pm

nichodemus

nichodemus

10,606 posts

Charles II

Death for his father,
Merry Monarch plots away,
Return of the King.

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:48pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

4,141 posts

Murasaki tends to enjoy a bit of spirituality in poetry, so yours could do well. However
"Heal me from thy wounds"
Thy means your, meaning God injured the writer. I'm not sure if you intended to say that, but for one to ask/beg forgiveness against His judgement is to question His authority.

 

Posted Jan 3, '13 at 1:10am

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

Heal me from my wounds
Restore me from the darkness
God,guide me to light

 

Posted Jan 3, '13 at 5:39am

HahiHa

HahiHa

4,243 posts

Smaugs desolation,
It is free from fire's bane;
The Dread Worm is dead.

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