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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Dec 31, '12 at 8:15pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,891 posts

I can't help but be reminded of Mark 15


Bingo.
 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 9:50pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

97 posts

Heal me from thy wounds
Restore me from the darkness
God,guide me to light

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 10:28pm

ArgamenPhish

ArgamenPhish

726 posts

Pained and broken down
Lost in despair, looking up
Bestowed strength to me

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:17pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

97 posts

I hope I win this round because last round I did not win.

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:33pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

9,761 posts

Heal me from thy wounds


You know what thy means..correct?

Your sentence means: Heal me from your wounds
 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:42pm

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,299 posts

Knight

Charles II

Death for his father,
Merry Monarch plots away,
Return of the King.

 

Posted Jan 2, '13 at 11:48pm

EmperorPalpatine

EmperorPalpatine

9,477 posts

Murasaki tends to enjoy a bit of spirituality in poetry, so yours could do well. However
"Heal me from thy wounds"
Thy means your, meaning God injured the writer. I'm not sure if you intended to say that, but for one to ask/beg forgiveness against His judgement is to question His authority.

 

Posted Jan 3, '13 at 1:10am

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

97 posts

Heal me from my wounds
Restore me from the darkness
God,guide me to light

 

Posted Jan 3, '13 at 5:39am

HahiHa

HahiHa

5,305 posts

Knight

Smaugs desolation,
It is free from fire's bane;
The Dread Worm is dead.

Guess what I've been reading...

 

Posted Jan 3, '13 at 8:31pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

97 posts

Hey Hahiha,
you're format is 5-6-5 it must be 5-7-5.

Smaugs desolation,
It is free from fire's bane;
The Dread Worm is dead.


you're Haiku does not even talk about the topic Retoration

Guess what I've been reading...

It must be you're own haiku not a copy from a book.