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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Sep 2, '09 at 3:55pm

Pois0nArr0w

Pois0nArr0w

1,565 posts

Hollowing alone,
An ancient oak stands erect,
Holding dark secrets.

Yes.

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:07pm

shayneii

shayneii

2,436 posts

Haha... good job alt... I can't believe I got 2nd! :P

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:10pm

shayneii

shayneii

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Hey, posted the next contest on the Announcement Board in the Tavern. (if anyone cares... :P )

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:12pm

Bronze

Bronze

2,337 posts

Hmm I didn't even get an award that was named after me xD
Let me tell you what I got out of mine: A dead person laying in the bottom of a pond with their eyes wide open.
Anyway, here is my kind of sad fruit tree haiku.

Lonely tree swaying
Fruit to give but none to take
Waiting for someone

@poison, I guess you went with the fruit of knowledge instead of an actual fruit tree.

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:28pm

Pois0nArr0w

Pois0nArr0w

1,565 posts

I guess I did. But, if needed, revisions.

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:33pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

@ Poison:

I can see where your going with it; the 'dark secrets' being the fruit of knowledge. Its good, kudos to you for following the topic with out mentioning fruit. :)

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 4:53pm

sourwhatup2

sourwhatup2

3,255 posts

Danger lurks inside it
It stands out from the rest
It causes death

--If it's more syllables then it should be sorry xD If so tell me to do another--

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 5:02pm

sourwhatup2

sourwhatup2

3,255 posts

Lol wow I fail with Syllables.. Lol

Let me fix it.

Danger Lurks Inside
It will Stand out from the Rest
It will cause you death

--Ah there we go I think that's good.--

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 5:02pm

shayneii

shayneii

2,436 posts

Danger lurks inside it = 6 syllables (should be 5)
It stands out from the rest = 6 (should be 7)
It causes death = 4 (should be 5)

 

Posted Sep 2, '09 at 5:05pm

sourwhatup2

sourwhatup2

3,255 posts

I think I fixed it now though xD