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Haiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Posted Oct 25, '11 at 11:57pm

lilzozo

lilzozo

53 posts

ok this is my first one :)

The pond shelters them.
Creatures on the lillypads.
Living peacefully,

That's what i got.  good luck to all

 

Posted Oct 26, '11 at 12:03am

shift4101

shift4101

196 posts

Haiku's are easy.
But they don't always make sense.
Refridgorator.

 

Posted Oct 26, '11 at 7:17am

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

Haiku's are easy.
But they don't always make sense.
Refridgorator.

It's not like you're the first one who tried that.
Yours does not count. As it's A.) Not matched with the theme. And B.) Not yours. Which is considered plagiarism.

 

Posted Oct 26, '11 at 3:00pm

tiniesthawk

tiniesthawk

16 posts

Not to mention the misspelling and grammar mistake :)

 

Posted Oct 27, '11 at 6:31pm

Graham

Graham

6,422 posts

This commodity,
Rife with normalcy, still brings
infallible awe.

 

Posted Oct 27, '11 at 9:48pm

Ernie15

Ernie15

12,548 posts

Knight

Growth prospects are high,
Vested management interest
Shields our precious stock

 

Posted Oct 29, '11 at 2:21pm

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

Unlike Mav, I like judging the day after the deadline. No need to wait.

So I'll go over this professionally like Maverick sort of did...
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I'm bringing back the top 5 judging and critic. If you were not placed in the top 5, you can leave a comment on my profile with your haiku, and I would be more than happy to give you feedback.

I also want to clarify something. If you want to edit or replace your haiku with a different one during the contest, PLEASE point it out in your post so I know which one to judge. This happened with DudeGuy this week, and I was confused.

There was 16 entries this week. (Just saying)

So without further ado, I give you my first judging ever for the theme Emerging Growth.
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5th Place: Graham

This commodity,
Rife with normalcy, still brings
infallible awe

Graham, you are by far the most language adroit participant here. As much as the words struck me with a great poem, it sounded a bit funny aloud. But well done, Graham. I give you a 5th place cookie.

4th Place: tiniesthawk

Beneath the soil
Awaits untapped potential
Spring -- life flourishes

This one showed a lot of emotion. I loved the standing point of it. It was very nice. I would highly suggest adding punctuation to your future haikus. That way, we can better understand the rhythm you're trying to get at. But all that aside, here's a 4th place cookie (It has chocolate chips, don't tell Graham)

3rd Place: MagicTree

The fires have ceased
The great frozen landscape gone
A new beginning

You took the theme, and beat it several times with imagination. I loved it. You match the theme and life experiences into a great haiku. Just like the last one though, punctuation would help get the rhythm on track for the reader. You might have gotten first if you did... Here's a 3rd place cookie. Go, play with it or something...

2nd Place: Dair5

Dew dripping down stem.
The flower's bloomed, red and wide.
Seedling shows it's head

I can imagine this whole scene. A flower revealing it's beauty. There is nothing bad about this poem. I really enjoyed it. You did a great job putting the haiku to life. 2nd place cookie goes to Dair5!

1st Place and Merit Winner: EmperorPalpatine

I begin my life
With limitless potential:
What shall I become?

Nailed it. I loved it. By far the best I've seen this week. The growth you have made in this contest was outstanding, and it payed off. Your words and emotion make this haiku a merit winner. Congratulations Emperor Palpatine! Please contact a mod or admin for your merit!
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All of you did a wonderful job. I wish I could give all of you 1st place, but I can't. ):

Normally I don't give advice, but why not. If you want to practice your haiku writing with suggestions from experienced haiku poets, check out Haiku Land. Our top two contenders this week are consistent participants in the thread, and it helped me be the judge. It's a great help, and could benefit here in the Haiku Contest.

Well that's that. Congrats again to Emperor Palpatine for winning his merit.

This week's theme: The Long Forsaken Road, and is due November 8th. I wish good luck to all! Happy Haiku'ing, and Happy Halloween!

 

Posted Oct 29, '11 at 3:11pm

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

2,594 posts

This happened with DudeGuy this week, and I was confused.

Really? I didn't even consciously do that.

I sulk down this road,
No line on the horizon
Just need to keep goin'

 

Posted Oct 29, '11 at 6:39pm

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

Really? I didn't even consciously do that.

You had one on this page, and on this page. But I judged your first one.

 

Posted Oct 29, '11 at 7:45pm

Ernie15

Ernie15

12,548 posts

Knight

Nobody appreciated my stock haiku. :(

Oh well. I didn't expect too many people to get it.