Armor Games

Not really into poetry as of late, but I think I shall make another 5 minute poem. My head hurts and I'm tired, but I'll do my best to pass the time. Now where to start . . . .

Fusion

With a reactor flowing right,
My mind begins to slowly fight.
In unraveling the world takes flight,
Flying up higher than a kite.

Through the fusion of sanity,
The light of sight insanity.
I see my way, into night,
Not until another light.

To be continued (but probably not). . .

The last two lines of the first stanza are begging for some rebalancing syllable-wise, but otherwise it's a good concept and good execution.

The last two lines of the first stanza are begging for some rebalancing syllable-wise, but otherwise it's a good concept and good execution.

The last one seems off, dragging the other down. Reading it over I get:

With a reactor flowing right,
My mind begins to slowly fight.
In unraveling the world takes flight,
Up it is a flying kite.

Through the fusion of sanity,
The light of sight insanity.
I see my way, into night,
Not until another light.

Slightly better, although it could be improved on later.

Pretty good powm. Make it longer though.

Pretty good powm. Make it longer though.

Asking me to make a poem longer is sorta a double edged sword. I can make some walls of words that can make you cringe.

That's if you want me to make it longer XD