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The Pearl of life chronicles

Posted Jun 19, '10 at 6:05am

Secretmapper

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I've decided try making a story, since lot of people were doing this, and it would also be a great way to practice my writing skills.

Try to comment, so I could make the story better.
Oh, my characters haven't got any name yet, can you give one male japanese name, and another female japanese name?


Chapter I: The country of cloth.

A black figure appears in the room, carrying with him a sword. He paused and said:

"The time has come!"

It was a warm and yellow Thursday morning. A gravely wounded teenager wakes up in a dirty bed in a tent, not knowing who, or where he is. Having difficulty, he peeks to his left, and saw a lovely maiden nursing him. With the teenager's lips, he asks the maiden "Where am I? Who am I?" Upon hearing these, a man goes outside from the tent, and with the maiden's soft voice, she said "We found you at the old shrine of the Taketsugu". The teenager did not recall this, so he asked the maiden "Do you know, Who I am?"

The maiden gave her sad nod.

The teenager rested on the pillow of the bed, the maiden continuing nursing him. Outside, he heard loud noises, then a man wearing a robe with a staff came to him and said "Can you name yourself child?". The teenager said no, and he asks if the man if he was his father. "No, I am the country's priest. We have found you on the old shrine of Taketsugu, you were lying there unconscious. It was good we found you at the right time, the Reed clan was going to destroy it." The man said. The teenager then asks the maiden " Who Are you?" The maiden then introduces herself as the princess of the country.

The man(priest) then goes outside of the tent, and to a beautiful palace. He goes through many rooms until he finally reaches the throne. "My lord, It is truthfully miraculous, you daughter really has a lot of magical power within her. The boy's bones were fixed, and his muscles regenerated. If it weren't for the princess, the boy would have died.". The king then spoke to the priest "Does the boy know himself and what was he doing in the shrine?". "Apparently my lord, the boy does not remember anything.".

The king stands and tells the priest to go to the royal chamber.
"Do you think he is the one?" The king says with both truth and fear into his eyes. " I do not know my lord, but if he is, I think the princess is ready.".

....the king then said " But I'm not "....

"The resonance of the moon, the alignment of the stars, the rise of the sun. If it happens all at the same time, I am...." "Silence Priest" The king suddenly interrupts the priest.

The teenager then looks at the maiden again, "You are the princess? If you are, why are you nursing me? I thank you princess."
The princess then said "The priest says that I have incredible magical power, that is why I am the one that heals you. No one could heal you if it weren't for me."
"Then that means you are my savior. Thank you again."

I'd be updating as soon as I can.

 

Posted Jun 19, '10 at 6:56am

Secretmapper

Secretmapper

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Note that this is part of chapter I

Chapter I continuation

The teenager then mumbled "Will I be healed soon?" The princess then said to the teenager he was fully healed and just needed some rest.
The princess then packed up her things, and headed to the palace. She placed her supplies at her table, and headed to the balcony. "Hmm....I wonder what happened to him. Huh? What is that sound, it is pretty good to the ears. I can't.. I can't resist it, its like its calling me. What is that, bells?" The princess then saw flashes with her eyes. "What was that? its the country, the clan, and the teenager.". "PRINCESS!!" the priest and the king said as they slammed open the door. The princess then looks at them both "What's up?". Both the priest and king were speechless.

"Princess do you remember the prophecy that I told you about? I said you will learn it at the right time, didn't I?" The king said.

"Yes father, So, what is the prophecy?"

....The king was going to speak, when the princess was lifted up in the air. "Oh no." The priest said. "Can't you stop the process, priest?" the king asked swift fully and seriously to the priest.

The princess floated in mid air, and her heart glowed.

The teenager rises from the bed. He did not know why, but he felt the sudden feeling he should go to the princess. He rushed to the palace's doors, but the guards won't allow him.

"Get the boy" shouted the king to the priest. The priest then rushed to the tent, when he found the boy at the palace doors. The priest and the boy then went back to the princess' room.

Upon entering, the King said "too late"....

The boy then continued running to the princess jumping and grabbing her. He looked at the princess, who was presently unconscious.
"What happened to her?" the boy asked the king. "You must retrieve it, the part of the crystal is no longer in the country, if it falls to Reed's hands, He will have the source of ultimate power." The priest then casted a spell on the boy. "I will give you all my power. It would definitely come use full, but you still have to know how to use them by your self. Go on."

Upon the casting of the spell by the priest, the king used magic to teleport the boy and the princess. "May you be the one" That was the last words of the king.


-I finally conclude chapter one, two will be out soon hopefully.

 

Posted Jun 19, '10 at 11:07pm

jdoggparty

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That is really good. It really painted a picture in my mind, and it was very clear what was going on. Can't wait for part 2.

 

Posted Jun 20, '10 at 4:13am

Secretmapper

Secretmapper

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Chapter II: The foundation of strength, The foundation of will.

"HIYAH" shouts a samurai, as he slashes in half his country's enemies. "Learn to know where your limitations are!" He brags as he stabs his sword on the soft soil of the battlefield.

"You have gotten weaker Shidori." A girl in a beautiful dress speaks as she walks to the samurai.

"Weaker? Are you blind! I have gotten 10 times, if not 20 times stronger." The samurai brags again.

"But you still don't know the true foundation, the true meaning, the true heart of strength. If you can conquer others but not yourself, others will conquer you." The girl says with only truth as her tone.

"Yeah right!" The bad-mannered samurai says.

Shidori(the samurai) and the girl walks to a chariot, heading to a palace.

"Princess, I have proved my strength, why don't you still not give me the family heirloom? Please, I'll do anything."Shidori says to the girl/princess.

"As I have said Shidori, you still have not found the true foundation of strength. But of course, If you want, I could give you one final training. If you can pass this, I will give it to you." The princess says smiling, teasing Shidori.

"But my princess, I have been trained all of my 20 years of life. I possibly cannot know anything more than I already have." The samurai says.

"I thought you want the heirloom, and you said that you'll do anything for it. So, come forth the power of the wind, the fire, the earth and the air. Help me to enlighten this youth of the meaning of power." The princess shouts as she says the words.

"Huh? Princess, the four magical master corners? I have never seen you do this kind of magic for a long time. Wait a minute.... What, this power is used to teleport people through time and space. What are you doing?" Shidori says as he is driven forward by the wind.

"I will set you on training. You will come back here, and tell me the meaning of true power. After that, I shall give you your family heirloom, and the honor you deserve." The princess says to Shidori as he is being consumed by a dark material.

"What! Wait, I know the meaning of true power, Its guts, strength. I don't need..." Shidori shouts with his last words.


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"I have never seen you before, where do you live?" a merchant asks a man with a white robe and a yellow staff.

"I am a hermit." Says the man with pride, as he walks away from the store.

"Tell me if the power has reached this place." The man speaks to a bird, as he frees it in the dark night."If I don't move quick enough, I might be caught." The man speaks to his self.

He continues to walk through the city he was in, trying to avoid contact with any people. He gets out of the city, and continues to walk in the unsafe and violent desert."This sand storm is exceptionally strong. Still, the beating of this sandstorm is never going to equal my punishment. I must move on." The man speaks to himself yet again.

Will try to continue as soon as I can.

 

Posted Jun 20, '10 at 8:53am

Secretmapper

Secretmapper

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Without knowing where you are
Without knowing who you are
Without knowing why your there
You can only think of one thing
and that is to survive


CHAPTER III: The violent terrain

The teenager opens his eyes, and realizes that the spell of the king was teleportation magic. He still holds the princess in his hands.

"Help, help!" The boy shouts to the silent night in which he is in.

--this is a pretty short update don't you think? I'm sorry.

 

Posted Jun 20, '10 at 9:28am

SirLegendary

SirLegendary

4,420 posts

This is great! I love the first parts

 

Posted Jun 20, '10 at 3:40pm

Nurvana

Nurvana

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Yeah this has some serious potential man!

 

Posted Jun 20, '10 at 4:25pm

snipershot325

snipershot325

870 posts

DUDE you no how to write!,You should send this into a publishing company,once you finished the whole story!

 

Posted Jun 21, '10 at 6:35am

Secretmapper

Secretmapper

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Wow, thanks for the feedback.

Anyways, I don't know If you remember this but:

Oh, my characters haven't got any name yet, can you give one male japanese name, and another female japanese name?



Without knowing where you are
Without knowing who you are
Without knowing why your there
You can only think of one thing
and that is to survive


CHAPTER III: The violent terrain

The teenager opens his eyes, and realizes that the spell of the king was teleportation magic. He still holds the princess in his hands.

"Help, help!" The boy shouts to the silent night in which he is in.

Seeing that nobody is there that can lend their hand to him, he decides to carry the princess, and he walked to forward to the desert. Looking at the presently unconscious princess, the teenager says "Don't worry princess, I will find some shelter for us."

Unfortunately, fate was harsh to them, and they were held back by the strong sandstorm.

Looking at the midst of the desert, he saw a dark shadow from afar, going bigger and bigger.

"Is anybody there? Please help us." the boy pleads again.

The figure speaks with a large voice, as he looks around him. "Huh? Where are you?"

"Try to follow my voice!" The teenager shouts. Eventually the dark figure came to them, and appears to be a man with a robe, just like the country of cloth's priest. "What are you doing at this harsh desert?" asks the man, followed by the response of the boy "We have been teleported by a king of the country of cloth, I don't know why, but he seemed in a hurry while doing it.

"Let us go, by the beating of this storm, we could not last." the man said, as he walks forward.

After some time of walking in the sandy desert, the teenager breaks silence and said "What is your name? How come you happened to pass here?". The man looked at the teenager, and said "Oh! I am a hermit. I have long since left my country. My name is Cenere A. Utteridge."
(does not mean the mod Cenere, but just a random name I thought of.)

They continued to walk, until they saw some light. "Look, it must be a town." Cenere said. After walking for a few meters more, they finally reached the town.

The place was lovely, there were candles by the pathways, decorations all over the place, cheers, and drum rolls.

"Wow, They must have a celebration here." Cenere said to his utmost delight. "Anyways, what is your purpose here?" Cenere asks. "I don't know. I woke up on a bed this morning, with the princess nursing me. After that, she went to the palace, and after some minutes, I followed her. After that, I saw her floating in mid-air. I grabbed her, and the priest speaked the words:
You must retrieve it, the part of the crystal is no longer in the country, if it falls to Reed's hands, He will have the source of ultimate power. I will give you all my power. It would definitely come use full, but you still have to know how to use them by your self. Go on.
next thing I know, I was teleported by the king."the teenager explained...

The hermit was shocked as the teenager committed this words. "Crystals? Then that must mean the prophecy of eternal life."
The teenager had become curious of his words, and asked him what the prophecy was.

"Since I have started traveling, I have learned many things. That prophecy is one of them. You see, only the eight great men of the country of cloth knows about the prophecy. It has been dreamed about by the great king, as he is a dream-seer. One day, he said, that his daughter would have her incredible magical power taken away from her. A boy will come in the country, and will aid the princess in need. He also said that the princess' power will be transformed into a form of a crystal, so that it will be protected. Apparently, that is the only things I have managed to learn." Explained the hermit.

"We must find shelter, the more I examine the girl(princess), the more I can learn."

The hermit finds a rent-able place to stay. He grabbed the princess' hands and said "Her body is cold. A power of a person is also an important life source to them. If we cannot find a crystal soon enough, she might die."

"NO! I will not allow that to happen." The teenager said.

....We should move.

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Although You might not know of my past
And I do not know yours
One thing is for certain
I will know your future
And you will know mine


CHAPTER IV: The journey up-ahead
 

Posted Jun 22, '10 at 6:36am

Secretmapper

Secretmapper

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Okay, sorry for some grammatical errors and redundancy you can easily see. I'll try to do my best next time (which would be now!)

Although You might not know of my past
And I do not know yours
One thing is for certain
I will know your future
And you will know mine


CHAPTER IV: The journey up-ahead


Through the dusky night, The teenager and the hermit still dared to try to find the crystal....


"Hi, are you here for the festival?" Asks startlingly by the happy receptionist of the place they stayed. "Your new here aren't you?"

"Yes we are! We are travelers." said Cenere.

"You seem in a hurry, going somewhere? You didn't even had time to pack."asks the receptionist to the teenager.

"We need to find something, something important that belongs to the prin....." said the teenager, as he had been interrupted by Cenere "girl, yes, we need to find something that is important to the girl. Anyways, can you take care of her? She is currently unconscious."

"Oh, most certainly sir. We actually insist." said the receptionist.

As they walk out of the building, Cenere whispers to the teenager "Do not say anyone that we are with a princess, we do not want unwanted attention."

"Okay, the safety of the princess depends on that. Going back to the crystals, how are we going to find the it Cenere? The world is too big, is there any way we can track it?" asks the teenager as they were walking.


"The crystal is the magical power of the princess. As I have heard in my visit there, she has incredible amount of it, a power larger than mine. I should be able to sense the power. There is a very large power here, so it could be the princess'. I'll help you, don't worrry." Cenere responds.

"Thank you" the teenager said politely.

The hermit laughed about this, and asked "Why?"

"Because even if you had no reason to help us, you still did."

"Don't worry about it kid, I've got a large amount of free time. So let's go!"

So the two continued walking in to the night, which was enlightened by the candles of the town.

"The center of the town, That is where it is! Good thing that receptionist gave us a map. The center would be........ the town's municipal building!" The hermit said to the teenager.

Without any time to lose, they hurriedly went there.

As they reached the building, they saw an incredible number of people. The two maneuvered through the crowd, until they stopped on a big door. "Tickets please." A guard said.

"Tickets? what tickets?" Cenere asked

"There are only two ways to enter the tournament. That is either you want to be a contestant in the festival, or you have tickets." The guard spoke with his very large voice.

"What does it take to be a contestant?" the teenager asked. "You look serious kid, is this some kind of joke? He! You know you could die out there! No way you can be serious!" the guard said as he burst with laughter.

"But I am serious. I need to go there!"

--------Will try to update soon.

 
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