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The Land of Antonia

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 9:44am

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

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First of all, this story is fictional and the ants' social behaviors are different than in a real anthill-so please don't post a comment if it's going to talk about "Ants don't behave that way".

OF THE FOUNDING OF GARVARSON (Chapter 1)

The Call went on. Hundreds of Ants poured out of the Anthill. A dead cricket has been found not too far. It was massive, well, at least for Ant standards. Its huge legs were flat on the ground and its body was some inches long. Hundreds of ants slowly and carefully carried its huge body into the Anthill.
The Queen Koldrymandias is always hungry, but it's no time to eat. Nearby anthill Antopolis has been awkwardly sending ants to their food supply location, and many ants were starving. But, as mother of the great complex, she got the first bite. Then the cricket's body was munched by many ants, starting with the hungriest of all. They had been lucky to find a cricket of such size.

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"That cricket sure was heavy" told Ban the ant to his friends Lan and Zan "I'm happy we had a mouthfull. "
"Yes" Agreed Zan "Just hope the idiots of that other anthill...errr what was its name?"
"Antopolis" Told Ban to his Friend
"Well, those guys get away from our food." He angrily said " If I were queen, I would start the war. Let it begin, we got nothin' to lose and much to win"

But that was what he thought.

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"Granzan!" Called the Queen "A cup of water! I am thirsty. It is not a good thing, for I am your Queen!"
"Yes your highness, happy to help you Highness." He said Humbly. "Would you like..."
"Plain water fool" She said. Then she had him banished for asking a question. The Queen was proud.
The water was brought to her presence by the finest of chefs.

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Granzan took his family away in the night to avoid any questions. They wandered in the wild for many nights, eating any dead catterpilar or bug, with scarcely enough food to live. They passed the Great Antropolis and the Butterfly Plains.They took residence five miles to the East. They were the founders of anthill Garvarson in which liberty was ensured, and you could name yourself something that didn't end in -an, so Granzan changed his name into "Gransces", which in the language he created for his anthill, meant "The Free one" or "He who escaped opression".
Many ants, in either day or night fled away to the new anthill, were they learned Gransces's tongue. They all changed their names as it was, as tradition, fordibben for your name to end in -an. In some weeks, the ants in Garvarson were from ten ants to ten hundred, and then to ten thousand.
But each winter, the butterflies from Butterfly plain came to the anthill for a place to survive, and the ants welcomed them with open
hands, as long as they had their own food, for the ants in the anthill barely had enough for themselves. So, trade flourished as traders from this anthill, using butterflies as steeds, went into North, South and West, but never to the East, for the Wicked Queen there had her home.
They became rich, and soon had a great supply of food, so they didn't starve, unlike the nearby anthill, which completely depended on the nearby food supply. So, they built great walls, ten inches high and two inches wide to cover the anthill, and the anthill wasn't a simple mound, but a city with hundreds of miniature buildings and skyscrapers towering through the metropolis, and small suburbian houses. These buildings were made of white and grey bricks, while the wall was made of white bricks. Altough it had these great defenses, the Anthill lacked soldiers . But that was not a problem, for there were many mercenaries nearby.
And on the top of the great anthill, a great tower stood. It was completely made of bronze and iron, forged in the hands of Calderon the Great. It was twenty inches high, and could be seen for many yards. In the tower, the King, the Queen and their kids lived peacefully. The tower inside was far more beautiful than in the outside. IT was strong, very strong, and could resist hard storms and rocks, so, when storms came, the ants from all over the city came to seek shelter, and none was turned back, and they happily welcomed them, even if the only place available for them to be was in the king's room. But its engineers had designed it carefully, and there was room for 50,000 ants.

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Feedback would be appreciated!

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 2:00pm

Cinna

Cinna

775 posts

Hmm this is pretty good. That queen is a biatch though.

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 2:03pm

CommanderDude7

CommanderDude7

4,753 posts

I like it. Its funny how everything that is mighty in ant world is only a couple of inches.

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 2:49pm

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

4,065 posts

Thanks for the feedback. Expect the next chapter today or tomorrow.

Its funny how everything that is mighty in ant world is only a couple of inches.


The city Garvarson is a massive metropolis to ants, but any adult would easily destroy the Anthill in some steps.
 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 3:32pm

Cinna

Cinna

775 posts

What kind are they?

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 4:02pm

thoadthetoad

thoadthetoad

5,814 posts

this story is fictional and the ants' social behaviors are different than in a real anthill-so please don't post a comment if it's going to talk about "Ants don't behave that way".

Say what genre it is and all will be answered. IT looks like a fantasy story.

By the way: Antonia is actually a girl's name. Idn't that funny?
 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 4:24pm

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

4,065 posts

Oh, I didn't know that.....

Well, yes, it's a Fantasy Story.

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 5:58pm

cowmaster1

cowmaster1

701 posts

It's good. Ive always liked storys about ants. i wrote one once.

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 6:01pm

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

4,065 posts

What was the story about?

 

Posted Jun 29, '10 at 6:14pm

thoadthetoad

thoadthetoad

5,814 posts

Ants, of course.

 
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