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First Line Poetry

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 8:25pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

2,647 posts

It is worth fighting for,
My country's honor is worth this war.
I don't care if I die today.
Hell, I'm not even getting paid.

XD lmfao

 

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 8:33pm

Pazx

Pazx

4,191 posts

Poor sucker who has to create a poem out of an emote and an acronym.

 

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 10:41pm

aknerd

aknerd

1,119 posts

XD lmfao
Culture reaches new low
:) LOL
has to be much worse than hell
:0 OMG
The internet's not for me
^^ jkjk
I'd take reality anyday

new line:

You feed me the same line everytime

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:13am

Zaork

Zaork

247 posts

You feed me the same line everytime
and yet I keep listening
convincing me that we are fine
a tear filled christening

How can I believe your lie
when I have no reason
I can never reach the high
of which you are teasing

You are a tremendous saint
and also a spitting demon
our relationship is only paint
my life the product of semen

The grot is expanding

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:15am

Parsat

Parsat

1,793 posts

You feed me the same line every time:
"Satisfaction guaranteed"
But when your life fell into haze,
I came to miss you, Billy Mays.

RIP Billy Mays.

It's a bloody business

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:17am

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

2,647 posts

wowza nice job Aknerd!

I can't do parsats..

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:20pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

1,975 posts

It's a bloody business!
Signing papers, nothing more.
It's a bloody business!
There's nothing to abhor.
It's a bloody business!
People do it every day.
It's a bloody business!
We have to live some kind of way.
It's just a bloody business.
Said the spider to the fly.
It's a bloody business,
where good men go to die.

^ Too cliche, especially the end. Also, the tone is off and the pacing is awful. I don't like writing ones from Parsat's lines; I don't feel I'm doing them justice. Oh well, practice makes perfect.

I thought these days would last forever.

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:30pm

EnterOrion

EnterOrion

3,563 posts

I thought these days would last forever,
The days of plenty and living more.
Endlessly they passes me by,
All the while I die inside.

Living in endless suspense

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:39pm

DarkestNite

DarkestNite

164 posts

living in endless suspense
I search for simple sustinence
i am dying inside
with nowhere else to hide
I thought you loved me
But now i can see

You tricked me so well
And watched as i fell
You deserve a prize
for your perfect lies

Next line:
What you see is not me - I have died

 

Posted Jul 9, '10 at 1:24am

aknerd

aknerd

1,119 posts

wowza nice job Aknerd!

Thanks, but it's all lies. The internet is my bff.

What you see is not me - I have died
I do not notice those who cried
Or who kept dry with pride
Or my now-never-bride
Or mom at my side.
To death I ride
My life denied
Wish I'd
tried.

New line:
But I never did.

 
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