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First Line Poetry

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 5:23pm

Joey6855

Joey6855

173 posts

Summer's day is both short and long,
or so it seems as we tarry along.
The wind of the air is so crisp,
as a throw my dog's frisbee disc.

The parents grill the steaks,
as we wounder what rules to make.
for the game we are about to play,
will lead us into the end of day.

This actually seems okay to me. :D Hope you guys like it.

Is it worth fighting for

 

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 8:25pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,230 posts

It is worth fighting for,
My country's honor is worth this war.
I don't care if I die today.
Hell, I'm not even getting paid.

XD lmfao

 

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 8:33pm

Pazx

Pazx

4,494 posts

Poor sucker who has to create a poem out of an emote and an acronym.

 

Posted Jul 7, '10 at 10:41pm

aknerd

aknerd

1,276 posts

XD lmfao
Culture reaches new low
:) LOL
has to be much worse than hell
:0 OMG
The internet's not for me
^^ jkjk
I'd take reality anyday

new line:

You feed me the same line everytime

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:13am

Zaork

Zaork

256 posts

You feed me the same line everytime
and yet I keep listening
convincing me that we are fine
a tear filled christening

How can I believe your lie
when I have no reason
I can never reach the high
of which you are teasing

You are a tremendous saint
and also a spitting demon
our relationship is only paint
my life the product of semen

The grot is expanding

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:15am

Parsat

Parsat

1,810 posts

You feed me the same line every time:
"Satisfaction guaranteed"
But when your life fell into haze,
I came to miss you, Billy Mays.

RIP Billy Mays.

It's a bloody business

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 12:17am

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,230 posts

wowza nice job Aknerd!

I can't do parsats..

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:20pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

2,082 posts

It's a bloody business!
Signing papers, nothing more.
It's a bloody business!
There's nothing to abhor.
It's a bloody business!
People do it every day.
It's a bloody business!
We have to live some kind of way.
It's just a bloody business.
Said the spider to the fly.
It's a bloody business,
where good men go to die.

^ Too cliche, especially the end. Also, the tone is off and the pacing is awful. I don't like writing ones from Parsat's lines; I don't feel I'm doing them justice. Oh well, practice makes perfect.

I thought these days would last forever.

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:30pm

EnterOrion

EnterOrion

3,615 posts

I thought these days would last forever,
The days of plenty and living more.
Endlessly they passes me by,
All the while I die inside.

Living in endless suspense

 

Posted Jul 8, '10 at 9:39pm

DarkestNite

DarkestNite

164 posts

living in endless suspense
I search for simple sustinence
i am dying inside
with nowhere else to hide
I thought you loved me
But now i can see

You tricked me so well
And watched as i fell
You deserve a prize
for your perfect lies

Next line:
What you see is not me - I have died

 
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