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Posted Jul 9, '10 at 10:24pm

Parsat

Parsat

1,810 posts

Green as the spring's new grass
Are new recruits who will not last
The battle 'fore the setting sun
Takes with him the dead and gone.

A gritty sand beneath my feet

 

Posted Jul 9, '10 at 10:40pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

2,082 posts

A gritty sand beneath my feet
A feel the breeze, regret, repeat
The end of summer
Is kind of a bummer
But final days are bittersweet

Going for the surprise limerick here. The "kind of a bummer" should lighten the tone and put the second line in perspective.

Under a salt moon

 

Posted Jul 9, '10 at 10:41pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

2,082 posts

Oops, typo. Should read:

A gritty sand beneath my feet
Feel the breeze, regret, repeat
The end of summer
Is kind of a bummer
But final days are bittersweet

Under a salt moon

 

Posted Jul 9, '10 at 11:15pm

tnymeh

tnymeh

148 posts

A gritty sand beneath my feet
Feel the breeze, regret, repeat
The end of summer
Is kind of a bummer
But final days are bittersweet

Under a salt moon
Entreating crickets harmonized and crooned

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 1:47am

Parsat

Parsat

1,810 posts

tnymeh: This isn't the poetry chain...you create a whole new poem in FLP.

Entreating crickets harmonized and crooned
A southern song, to soothe men's minds
In promises of homecomings soon
Down to that beaten path that winds.

What happens to a dream that's died?

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 1:56am

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

2,044 posts

What happens to a dream that's died?
That the dream shall fade away,
while everybody else cried,
I just watched with dismay.

In the evening sky,

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 2:13am

aknerd

aknerd

1,276 posts

In the evening sky
Lies the unknown
A mystery to me
I traded sunset baseball
A yellow ball bouncing
in the could de sac
For closing duties
A vacuum and a mop

The evening sky
Must be meant for others
For the young, old, and homeless
I wonder if they still play
Does the yellow ball still bounce
Or was it thown away with my memories

Forever Falling

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 9:49am

Kyouzou

Kyouzou

4,753 posts

Forever Falling
Overcome by chaos
Realizing a rocky landing

Even dieing

Venues of greatness; unreached
Ever so many things to do
Realizing the end has come

A solemn wish

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 11:14am

DarkestNite

DarkestNite

164 posts

a solemn wish
is  all i have
i've lost my will
As I have my life

I wish it could
Have been different
I wish we loved
Like Bonnie and Clyde

We only lasted
Like the sun
each day
We rose and we fell

And that is our world

remind me of memory

 

Posted Jul 10, '10 at 1:10pm

slayguy8

slayguy8

510 posts

Remind me of memory,
A happier time.
Of peace and friendship,
And our love combined.

When our hearts were free,
Minds were clear.
Thats my memory,
My sweet, sweet dear.

As the tide rose

 
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