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Posted Jul 10, '10 at 9:30pm

MisterGovernor

MisterGovernor

64 posts

As the tide rose
It reminded me of days ago
Where we frequently frolicked
Along these very sands
Now you're so very distant
In middle America
Far from the churning waters
Of the summer with me
Just like a buried beachgoer
The tides wash over my trapped head
And the memories mingled with the amber sand
I hope you know
You leave a golden glow.

Jeebus. I suck at poetry. But...

Inside a moving palace

 

Posted Jul 11, '10 at 5:09pm

slayguy8

slayguy8

510 posts

Insisde a moving palace
stuck for eternity
always moving
never silence

 

Posted Jul 11, '10 at 10:28pm

aknerd

aknerd

1,275 posts

^^ You need to post a new first line.

Inside a moving palace
Turrets crumbling under heavy memories
The door boarded shut
Windows covered with tinfoil
Here I wait

Hmm this one turned out pretty bad.

New Line:
Right lane must turn right

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 12:33pm

slayguy8

slayguy8

510 posts

Right lane must turn right
you in a car late at night
will you be smart
and do the right thing

or chance for a ticket
is it worth it
if you want to go right ahead
dont ask me i could be dead

Is that a UFO

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 4:41pm

EnterOrion

EnterOrion

3,615 posts

Is that a UFO,
Flying by my eyes?
Or is it ghost,
Full of lifeless lies?

Ectoplasmic fury from the stars,
Or superstitious abduction waiting to start.
Lifeless creatures from the void,
Roaming and killing without a heart.

Or is it the government, tricking us all,
Using the rumors to lie in secret.
We all know all that they're doing,
But are too blind to see it.

Next line: Hello, cruel world,

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 7:16pm

Parsat

Parsat

1,810 posts

public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world")
}
}

Could not compile:
You need a semicolon.

When I wake up in the morning

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 7:29pm

Kyouzou

Kyouzou

4,753 posts

public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world")
}
}

Was that your poem?

When I wake up in the morning
The bright sun wishes me good-morning
The song of a lark fills my ears
The breeze creates the music of spheres


In my life

In addition, the last line is referring to wind chimes.

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 7:57pm

OperationNilo

OperationNilo

2,044 posts

Here's my response.

In my life,
there is a slug,
a nasty dark spot,
a disturbing bug.

Get away from my life,
the darkness hasn't gone,
I must get it away,
before dawn.

Here I am,
I am dark,
My life would be better,
but then there was a spark.

A light is shining,
a new hope,
Be gone now darkness,
be gone.

When I was a kid

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 8:24pm

Graham

Graham

6,420 posts

When I was a kid
My poems all sucked
Now I'm a man, still
No change in luck

public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world")
}
}

Could not compile:
You need a semicolon.

Ha. I get it.

Ha. I get it.

 

Posted Jul 12, '10 at 8:50pm

CommanderDude7

CommanderDude7

2,408 posts

Ha. I get it.
I feel so proud.
I wear my smile smugly.
I walk taller than before.
I cant be defeated.
I rock.

Ugh bad one.

 
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