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Posted Jul 3, '10 at 4:38pm

Parsat

Parsat

2,224 posts

Just a few clarifications.

The most essential thing in the lines given are the words. As long as their meaning is not completely impaired by changing punctuation, you can feel free to change it and give yourself that flexibility. By "meaning not completely impaired" I mean a "eats, shoots and leaves" kind of thing. Generally speaking this means internal punctuation in the line shouldn't be changed.

Also, as a courtesy, bold the line that you supply so that it's easy to pick out.

If there happens to be a conflict where two people write about the same line at the same time and supply different first lines for the next person, it's up to that next person which line they want to start with.

The sky of grand azure
glimmers like a polished vein
of turquoise new exposed to
oxidizing air.

We take a piece and wash a piece,
but it is never as pristine as it was.

Many a sleepless night I found

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 5:50pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,420 posts

Many a sleepless night I found,
Myself thinking of you.
The way you walk,
The way you sing,
The way you talk.
The more I think of you,
The more I dream of you,
Without ever actually sleeping.

Sucks, but I am going against the ninja here...

Starry skies

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:22pm

pHacon

pHacon

1,939 posts

Starry skies,
The beauty of the cosmos.
How does it feel
To look back in time?

Short poem is short

What I do for you

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:30pm

slayguy8

slayguy8

729 posts

What i do for you
id everything
cooking cleaning
to me you have no meaning
thats what i do for you

why me

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:38pm

Joey6855

Joey6855

203 posts

What I do for you,
Is combine u and i to make two.
And even though our lives are poo,
I know ill always have you.

Sucked huh? but its my first one.

I wake to the sunlight

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:39pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,420 posts

Why me?
I ask myself all the time.
Why me?
Why do I deserve to be the victim of his crime?

wont finish that one lol.

HEY SHAMALAMA DING DONG

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:43pm

pHacon

pHacon

1,939 posts

Joey's:
I wake to the sunlight
of this glorious day
Dawn's beauty breaking
through the clouds
I feel happiness.

Moon's:

HEY SHAMALAMA DING DONG
THIS PHRASE SOUNDS SO WRONG
Someone must have bought a new bong...

Are you sure?

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:52pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,420 posts

Ninja'd. a very late ninja.... hmm hopefully i will not be ninja'd as i try to fix the ninja'd-ed.

I wake to the sunlight,
To find you beside me.
Nothing is more beautiful than you,
Because you are all I see.
I want to be there as you awaken.
I want to help you calm down when you feel shaken.

I will always be here
To hold your hand
To wipe your tears
To dance with you
To hold you near
To sing with you
To get rid of your fears.

I love you.
With every cell in me.
I know you do too.
You have my heart and the key.



Never written it from a guys POV. kewl.
I so know that i have been ninja'd BUT OH FRIGGIN WELL.

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:56pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,420 posts

http://i756.photobucket.com/albums/xx210/MikuMitsuki/tumblr_l4wnivi1HU1qzo1a0o1_500.png

 

Posted Jul 3, '10 at 6:59pm

slayguy8

slayguy8

729 posts

Are you sure?
that the sky is blue
Are you sure?
that penguins never flew

Are you sure?
that space is endless
Are you sure?
that is not yor mess

Are you sure?
that we are not specks of dust
Are you sure?
that we must

Are you sure?

next line
How do i get out of here

 
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