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Parsat
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Jester

This is a bit of a forum game, but at the same time it has the capacity to result in a bit of poetry, so it goes here. I'm going to supply a line of poetry, and the following poster is to create a poem using the line I gave as their first. Along with their poem, they supply a line for the next person to write poetry on. No restrictions on the type of line or poetry; just keep the line open ended.

Here's the first line:

A mountain pokes out awkward in the mist

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CommanderDude7
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Peasant

Everytime I look at you
My palms begin to sweat
My toungue is tied
My face is red
I wish I knew what to say
Everytime I look at you

CommanderDude7 is an aspiring poet

slayguy8
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720 posts
Shepherd

Everytime I look at you,
I lose my breath.
Becoming speachless,
But never-the-less.

I love you,
Your beauty is stunning.
A warm feeling,
of your smile.

A life without you,
Is a world without love.
But when I have a glance,
I know it is pure romance.

Wow I pored my self in this poem it is about a friend

Next line is
The fear will stop

CommanderDude7
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Peasant

Ahh was it a ninjaing or did no one want to write about me?

The fear will stop
Once this is over
I tell myself that
But I dont believe it
How can this end?
A horror unfolding forever
Nightmares during the day
AHHH! NO DENTIST FOR ME!

My joy is gone

slayguy8
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720 posts
Shepherd

My joy is gone,
The sadness sweeps in.
It is dark and black,
I feel under attack.

The happiness has left me,
Alone in the dark.
I feel a feeling,
Then then it sparked.

All I need to do,
is to get out of the dark.

Yay another one

Next line= The waves wash in

CommanderDude7
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Peasant

The waves wash in
Clearing everything away
My guilt
My sadness
My rage
Nothing remains
as the waves wash me away.

The fish flipped for joy

slayguy8
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720 posts
Shepherd

The fish flipped for joy,
He caught a bug.
He found a pearl,

He did forget.
Not to bit hooks,
So he was caught.

not as good as the other but ok

The next line is
As the wind blows

Kyouzou
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Scribe

As the wind blows
The leaves rustle
And the branches sway

Autumn is in the air
Crimson and gold arrive
Coloring the leaves

Kyouzou
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Scribe

The next line will be,

Why did you save me?

vontje
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vontje
867 posts
Peasant

Why did you save me?
when you knew i didn't want to
i was tired of my life
dead is what i wanted to be

You knew i am only wrong
so why did you even save me?
When you know i can't handle this
when you know i'm not that strong

too much i've done
but you can't save me
in a few seconds
i will be gone.

Next one: the tears in my eyes

slayguy8
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Shepherd

The tears in my eyes,
Soon run down my face.
A loss of a loved one,
is a reason to cry.

If thats not sad,
look back on life.
You might just see,
what everybody else does.

Wow a nother good one cool. .
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Next line
as the tiger runs

MoonFairy
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3,391 posts
Farmer

As the tiger runs,
I try to run alongside.
I can't keep up,
But he slows down,
Natures rules we both abide.

I see no danger in him,
He doesn't see it in me.
He is just a majestic beast,
Waiting to be free.

So I will run beside him,
Faithfully as a friend.
And we will both wait patiently,
Till we can run again.



[b]
Everybody knows it[/b

CommanderDude7
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Peasant

Everbody knows it
Why dont you admit it?
Its inevitable
They'll find out
and when they do
you'll be sorry

CommanderDude7
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CommanderDude7
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Peasant

whoops
I forgot

slayguy8
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slayguy8
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Shepherd

I forgot,
what did i forget.
still wondering
still forgeting
hmmmmmmmmmm


Bad next line
At the old apple tree

Gantic
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King

At the old apple tree
sat a boy
Whose name I thought
was Malloy.

But then that boy Malloy
told to me
He just moved in
with fam'ly.

I could've sworn that boy
was Malloy.
Now I call him
Apple boy.

Sousa, Joplin, Ives and Copland

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